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Read MoreWith stars concealed in the sky, it's getting near midnight here on the train platform. The air is slightly damp, and the station lights have a misty aura. The rain's barely even falling yet.From a metal bench, I keep...
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Thank you, Damian.
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Brilliant work.
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Thanks Thomas.
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There’s nothing wrong with this, so i don’t know what you were wary of?
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I don’t think they’ll be a part 2. lol but thanks for the comment, Styx. 🙂
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I’m glad to see it end on a happy/hopeful note. Having been a lonely guy many times, I’d say this fellow’s thinking is right on. I’ve always thought there must be lonely lady for me out there somewhere, if only we could meet. Nice writing–I like your stories.
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Thanks Sam. I’ve been lonely so long it kind of wore out. lol Glad you’re here. Tim (Relic).
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Tim, you painted loneliness in the city with brilliant brush strokes here, in an emotional train ride that will not be soon forgotten by me. This is what great prose can do. it is felt deep down in my heart and soul.
John
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Read Moremy mortality before me I prepare an offeringcataloging and willingly admitting my sinheld tight to the dark artist of my soul, there is conflictwith aspirations to the light I am betwixt two worldsand I can't reconcilemy spirit is shaded...
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Powerfully penned, Brenda. Excellent write my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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hello dearest Damian thank you graciously I deeply appreciate your thoughts ❤️
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Hoi Chère C.,
If I may quote you:
in my slumberous state I cause chaosDon’t we all?
I embrace the thought in real life.
There’s nothing more tedious or boring than perfection.So:
in my slumberous state I cause chaos
Is the cherry on the cake.
Just my opinion.À lovely write!
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hello dearest Gus thank you I likef that line too…I cherish your thoughts you are always positibe and I appreciate that ❤️
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Fantastic spill, my friend! May Arawn hear your darksome call and be your lantern into Annwfn. Not just yet though, we need more of your beautiful melancholy. Excellent poem as always.
Clay
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thank you dearest Clay for such a beautifully poetic comment you are appreciated ❤️
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There is NO SIN in being a woman, none. If there is SIN, it is brought about by the burdens placed on women in a male dominated, patriarchal system and society. It’s a strange evolutionary process that a biological difference (having babies) became the source of oppression.
While I applaud the artistic value of this poem, its sadness, its flow, and metaphor, I am also torn in that there should be no sacrifice made. Instead, there should be a head held high acceptance of the chaos, of celebrating joining the chaos made by all of us as human beings, and we are a chaotic bunch.
Crimsin, I hope I have not trampled all over your poem’s garden, it’s just that women are not evil or gods, just human. And certainly not for sacrifice.
Curt
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hello dearest Curt good afternoon I get what you’re saying but my sin is more memories and reflection on days passed things I have done and regret I try to reconile them in me but they stilll make sad they are coming more ofteh these days and I’m not doing well it seems my soul is aware that my time grows short… I deeply appreciate your beautiful comment ❤️
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Read MoreI died a little yesterday or felt a little deadBut today I'm feeling better It was only in my head.************************Yesterdaysomething in me pressed pause.A heavinessperhaps a tiny death,or maybe justthe absence of myself.I tried to move,but each gesturefelt laboured and opaque like...
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I really like this dearest Benny great photo too ❤️
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Thank you for reading and enjoying.💋
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The mind is a trip… I much enjoyed this one
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The mind is a trap indeed and one that ensnares me from time to time.
Thanks for reading.🙏
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Powerfully penned, Peter. Another excellent write my friend. The mind is full dusty corners, nooks, and crannies where secrets often hide. Nicely done. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Read MoreI am the ocean deep with mindWhere thoughts are waves that twist and windEach current pulls what reason knewInto the depths where truths undo I drift beneath the surface calmWhere silence sings a sinking psalmMy tides forget what they revealThen...
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Feel lost and unending this depth.
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Thank you
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Powerfully penned, Mstrmnd. Amazing write with excellent wordplay my friend. Dig this. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Read MoreI am the metaphor that bendsWhere meaning breaks and never endsI speak of all, yet say no thing A silent song the void can singI’m language shaped to lose its wayA truth that lies in what words weighEach phrase I...
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Powerfully penned, Mstrmnd. Into the book it belongs! Excellent write with many layers and a ton of depth my friend. Nicely done. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Passionately penned, Tim. Great storytelling my friend with a very relatable story. Nicely done. Appreciate you.
Damian