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Read MoreA haunting beauty you are moonlit, mortality still flowing with passion. A haunting romanticism our shared lips are, bathing together in crimson moonlight. Your kiss lingers well beyond death, and beyond our last cold moment. And there's a dominance in your kiss... Hopefully not eternal...
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I love the gothic style here.
Very powerful and I envy such a beauty…haunting.
Love it.
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Powerfully penned, Daniel. An intriguing write my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Read MoreYour inconsistencies are consistentHappy yet state your sadAngry but seem to be gladRelaxed but wound tightWant to be gentle yet you biteNo one understandsNo one took the timeNo one gave a shitAlways left behindWeeping from rageSpilling into the calm...
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Intriguing…
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Thank you, willow
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I like the contrast you used in some verses. Dark thoughts indeed. Well done, Fia!
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Thank you, M.E appreciate that
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![Profile picture of Damian DeadLove]()
Powerfully penned, Fia. Into the book it belongs! Amazing write my friend, with dark vibes very present. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Thank you, Damian. was in the zone.
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Thank you, Adira;))
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Fantatic!
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Thank you, Adagio
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G’Mornin’, Fia 🌤️
Good title, and what a great lead-in with V1’s frustrating contradictions setting the mood for what’s to come (L2, make it “you’re” sad).
Boy howdy! You sure know how to express the angst so many of us have had to endure and overcome; yet, it seems some never do … sadly so.You’re such a creative writer, Ria: I admire your keen ability to weave vivid imagery and emotion throughout every verse and in the use of spot-on rhymes, timely line-breaks, and smooth flow.
Excellent wrap-up verse, too. For rhyme’s sake with “despair,” consider using “there” rather than “here” (just a thought).“Wake, wake from this despair! (great poe-esque touch)
It is me you’re talking to …
no one else is there.”Fia, you’re such a joy to read and share with. 🌈
Thank you ever-so warmly! ⁓ Richard🖌-
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Thank you so much for the compliment and comment. Richard I appreciate it
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Oh, sure thing, Fia!
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Yes, it has been changed. Ty ;))
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You misunderstood, Fia … I meant to change L4 to “there”. Not L2, which was fine as “despair”.
So “despair” and “there” rhyme.
(like this)
Still, you find me in your dreams
Wake, wake from this despair
It is me you’re talking to
No one else is there.
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Very captivating.
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Thank you, CasketSharpe;))
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Thank you, Steven;))
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Love is like a Cossack sword dance. Reflex and intuition combined with lethal beauty. 🌼
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hello dearest Joe indeed it is thank you graciously for your thoughts 💕
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A well written piece! “)
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thank you dearest Me good evening 💕
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![Profile picture of Damian DeadLove]()
Passionately penned, Brenda. Excellent write my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Read MoreWhen our cold moment begins... You lament about unspoken secrets. My lips meet yours and there's no warmth. When our cold moment heightens... We are both intimate and distant. You're neither here nor there. When our cold moment climaxes... Your heavy breath frigid as we share...
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Passionate and sad. Nice descriptions
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Passionately penned, Daniel. Always stellar imagery in all your writes my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Beautifully penned, Brenda. Amazing write my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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hello dearest Damian thank you kind soul have a beautiful evening 💕
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I agree this is beautifully penned.
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good afternoon beautiful Fia thank you graciously 💕
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And there’s a dominance in your kiss…
Love that line. Good piece