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    Evening Rest

    Your long-awaited evening rest,once beckoned by your bedroom light,has called you in.  Sandcastle's crest,sworn to defend, must bid goodnight. Day seeks its end.  At dawn's first sight,your long-awaited evening restrestored your flight.  Your passion soaredbeyond the nest where you'd recite  your...

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    • Powerfully penned, DK. This one pulls at the heartstrings my friend. Phenomenal write, thanks for sharing. Appreciate you.

      Damian

    • You amaze me every time you put pen to paper…

    • You’re an impressive writer. Thank you for sharing.

    • Bad Uncle is impressed ….

      BIG LIKE

    • Beautifully worded. Magically intriguing. You present this topic with patience & understanding. A gentle, moving piece. Nice work DK.

    • Very nice and, very likely, my favorite form.

    • Your imagery cushions the blow of loss with love. 🌼

    • Me too. Thanks for reading, Mary!

    • It’s a formal poetry style called a Quatern. Eight syllables per line, four stanzas.
      Thanks for checking this out, SeaCat!

    • Beautiful and peaceful. I often wonder as everyone does, what is next. I think it’s not for us to know so we get to choose to believe whatever. I choose to believe I’ll be reunited with everyone I lost and miss. And if I’m wrong well not like I’ll know.

      Great ink

      • Even if it is what we believe, it probably won’t be the way that we think.
        Thanks so much for reading this, Nick. I love your comments!

        xoxo

    • If nothing else, DK🍷

      I’m helplessly obliged to bow, Dear Poetess, in sheer respect and awe at how accomplished your poetic acumen has been developed … and, this brilliantly rendered French Quatern rendering proves how genuinely undeniable it truly is.
      Your amazingly diverse skills are brought vibrantly to light via the many varied themes you bring to the page in widely abundant mastery of poetic forms, command of diction, flowing syntax, metaphoric imagery, emotive instinct, spot-on enjambments and rhymes, and so much more … all brought forth through the rich poetic voice of that of a poetesses’ poetess.

      “You know me not, though knew me well.
      I cannot reach you through the white
      of Heaven’s clouds … as they ingest
      your long-awaited evening rest.”

      How more perfectly validated could loss of memory be expressed(?) … I really do not know.
      And, your Artwork choice? Exemplary!

      Well, lest I wear thinner my exuberant welcome, let me close with a simple humble, “Sigh!”
      Most reverently, Dear Lady-Poet! ⁓ Richard 🙏

      • I’m going to shove my tongue down your throat, Richard. I’m sorry. I can’t help it. I want to French Quatern you to death. I promise not to make you suffer, though. I’ll do things to take your mind off suffocating. Give me your little white cloud of Heaven.

        xoxo

    • Suffering? What suffering?
      Seems my “mind” you’ve already distracted … and, if I happen to suffocate, what a way to go … LOL!

    • Hey ITR! Damn, I’m glad you’re back. When I was reading your stuff, I noted you hadn’t signed on in a month. At least, that’s what it looked like. I’m glad you didn’t miss your gold medal. I love your prose.

      So, thanks for the review and critique. I need to go back and adjust the spacing properly. I’m not sure what happened there. This kind of poem should have stanzas (quatrains). Anyway, I’m so glad you like it. I love the Blue Ridge Mtns btw. How lovely it must be to live there. I’m from N.C. and visited The Biltmore many times – not so far away.

    • Now I can see why its a winner!
      I feel sad for not reading this one before. A heart touching write. Well done!
      And congrats! “)

      • Oh, thank you, M.E
        I’ve got a lot of crap posted. Easy to miss something. I’m glad you like this.

        xoxo

    • Wow, the meter in this is gorgeous. Evokes the great classic poets. Impressive.

    • Tremendous work. Powerful writing.

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    My Candle Flame

    Should I pinch  my now small flame and die?   Is death really the only way? Should I extinguish what I have left?   Why do memories flow from my flame and dry to a still, only to linger on?   Is my flame being blown out by...

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    bohemian woman

    Bohemain Womanbohemian woman wild spiriteddaydreaming blues shade her personalityhippie chick her rock n roll styleseductive culinary as she marries flavorsgentle as a flower but powerfulher love of her man fiercenothing stands in the way of itthe wind and air...

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    Her Delta of Venus: Part Three

         Then Meg paused as she gazed into Daniel's blue eyes pleading, "I hope you have something to soothe the pain, baby." Then she playfully nugded her nose against his, then leaned in for a kiss but playfully...

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    • That’s a lot of action for a parking lot, babe!
      I have to tell you that I LOVE sweaty sex. One of my favorite memories is losing power during a thunderstorm and getting fucked in the bedroom with the window up… rain pouring in on the carpet, but we just didn’t care. It was hot and humid as shit. No air conditioning. No fans. Soaking the bed in perspiration. Glistening. Banging like animals.

      And your finger has been up my ass for a while. Maybe you better suck it clean.

      • Oh that’s hott. Wait till tomorrow for part four, more action in the parking lot under the lightning storm hehe. And you gave me an idea in your comment about my next short story.
        Maybe I should have tasted more of yoy on my finger! Surprise coming!

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