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    Strike a Lighter

    Arrived hand in handNo standing in line Got our backstage passLet’s make it lastNo stadium seatingOutside beneath the stars. Music’s ready to start  We’re downing crown & cokeHe steps a little closerI’m moving a little slowerNah we should go fasterBaby...

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    • Fine, Metallica it is, when next we bed together. What!
      I prefer Black Sabbath, but that’s some dark shit. I’ll get all trippy on ya. LOL

    • Promises promises.

      But I prefer to listen to Taylor Swift! Hahaha

      As long as I’m with you it doesn’t matter:)

    • this is badass beautiful Adelphina and we both about rockers tonight… this is really cool ❤️

      • Thank you Crimson! My first concert was Aerosmith.
        When the song Train Kept A Rolling came on the crowd went crazy!!
        Left a lasting impression.

        Thank you for stopping by lovely:)

    • Haha this is so cool. I can not tell you how many mosh pits erupt at the last Metallica concert I went to. From opening bands

      • Hahaha. I just moved out of the way. lol.
        I love all the anarchy of it. Music has a way of taking you there!!!
        Thank you for the snaps!! Woop Woop!!

    • Beautifully penned, Adel. Into the book it belongs! Gotta love a musical write that appreciates the mosh pit! Excellent work my friend. I knew Mark would bring up Sabbath! Appreciate you.

      Damian

      • Of course he’d bring up Sabbath. Hahaha
        He’s not a swifty fan, so I had to tease him about it. lol

        This was a fun write.
        I had the whole scene in my head playing out.

        Thanks for your snaps amigo!!

    • Girl, this has so much spirit in it. Sometimes the “just for fun” ones actually light up the room. Big smiles all around on this one.

      • Hi Willow!! Long time no see chica:)
        I’m so happy you stopped by for a comment!
        This one kind of wrote itself. I love when that happens. That high is addicting! lol
        And that it made you smile is a bonus:)

        Thanks for stopping by!

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    While Love Got Strangled

    just a permanent scab the one you constantly pick i’m the back you stab the one vice you can’t kick   everything feels so heavy with this weight i carry why don’t you tell me how i’m not so scary   unable to speak the truth so we repeat a...

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    • I’m big on the closing lines of a poem. What an impact they make. It’s the impression your reader walks away with, that stays in your head like a song you can’t shake. The lost loves and the unrequited loves are always on my hit list. You nailed this one, Damian…so good!

      • Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Kelly. So glad you connected with the write my friend. I agree with you, coming from a lyrical background, I always love a good line. But the beginning and ending are very important indeed. Appreciate you.

        Damian

    • This was hidden? Man, this was screaming to be let out. “No winners because the race was fixed.” Yup.
      This is a great piece, cuz

      • Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Fia. So glad you connected with the write my friend. I wrote this before joining DU. I love that line as well. It was screaming to be let out. Appreciate you, cuz.

        Damian

    • The last stanza is a real ass kicker! The rhyme scheme is cool too. It’s obvious that you care about your results. It shows in your craftings. This is thought provoking, but not heavy. Well done Damian.

      • Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Mark. So glad you connected with the write my friend. It was an ass kicker, I penned this during a time of self-therapy and reflection. I’ve always cared, always executing is another story. This was a cool discovery, because I had forgotten about it. lol. Appreciate you.

        Damian

    • I too enjoyed the rhyme scheme. Everyone can relate to this. We’ve all been there.
      When you both know it was over a few months back!
      Great write amigo!

      • Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Adel. So glad you connected with the write my friend. It’s a relatable story indeed. Appreciate you.

        Damian

    • wow dearest Damian so much power and passion in this I am floored ❤️great write…

      • Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Brenda. So glad you connected with the write my friend. It was a very reflective time in my life to say the least. Appreciate you.

        Damian

    • Now aint that the truth so bloomin well poemed .. Say it like it is why don’tcha eh .. Great ink Damian & subsequently awarded Nev’s dubble 👍👍

      • Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Neville. So glad you connected with the write my friend. Sometimes you gotta say it loud and proud. Honored to receive the dubble. Appreciate you.

        Damian

    • This is dark, deep, and brilliant, Damian. I’m glad you dug it out of the vault! The honesty in this poem is cutting, and the final lines–“instead of owning we rented / while love got strangled” –are a phenomenal, memorable finish. A wicked good read.

      • Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Roma. So glad you connected with the write my friend. Those final lines are my favorite as well. It was penned in a time of self-reflection, and getting to really know myself. Without my addiction clouding my vision. Appreciate you.

        Damian

    • “another moment dies”

      That’s the thing people lose sight of. Once the moment is gone…it’s gone. What we make of it bears a lot of weight. I’d rather carry honest weight than the baggage of pretense. I’m glad you found this one. It needed to breathe, my friend

      • Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Willow. So glad you connected with the write my friend. Spot on in your analysis as always, it did need to breathe a little. It was simmering on the stove in the word kitchen. lol. Appreciate you.

        Damian

    • Damian, great rhyme and flow while delivering a strong message.
      Excellent work sir.

    • Hard hitting piece. So true my friend. kick-ass write Damian.

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    Sugar Skulls and Dragons

    Bat wings emerge    From the heart's aortas  Caged inside a red rose    Metallic skeletal frameBusting out of the box     A Pandora Aurora   Of sweeping blue green     Blazing fiery flames Flying with the...

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    • Sugar skulls and dragons, haha that is a piece.

    • This is wild and intoxicating! It’s like a fantastical flight through desire, danger, and celebration all at once. An exploration of the tension between freedom and restraint, beauty and ferocity. The title even makes me think of those sugar marshmallow pops…sweet, colorful, and totally irresistible–mirroring how the poem balances whimsy with intensity.

      • I love this comment!!
        I was thinking about a whole other dimension where Sugar Skulls and dragons coexist. lol
        It would make a great comic!!
        Thank you for you support:).

    • Just the write amount of spookyness for the run up to All Hallows Eve .. and if I’m not mistaken a teensy taste of gentle & most tasteful sensualness too .. Very nice indeed Ma’am .. Neville 😎👍

      • Hi! I think Sugar Skulls are very sensual with a hint of edginess. I love incorporating beauty and darkness. Nothing too overbearing. Just got to find the right tone and balance. I also love dragons! Yes, I’m a huge fan of Game of Thrones.
        Plus I was talking smack to my fiancé about wanting a moped with sugar skulls then he said he wanted one with dragons. Hahaha.

        Thanks for snaps on this Neville!

        P.s. my best friend’s name is Nellie.
        I had to do a double take when I read your name. lol

    • Beautifully penned, Adel. Into the book it belongs! Excellent write my friend. Appreciate you.

      Damian

      • Hey Damien! Thank you my friend:)
        This was a fun one to write
        I had a mini movie going on.

    • Look at you becoming a regular! What!
      Hey, don’t forget who has hooked you up pretty good with Pandora stuff! Yeah, the guy with all the dragon tatts. LOL
      I’m so glad that you’re taking some time to post in here. This one (and the summary, grrrr. LOL) is a fantastical read with oodles of imagery filling our brains. Clever and well thought out, lover.
      We can’t neglect our writing! It’s our first bonding!

    • Did you just type the word oodles!! Hahahaha
      That is so cute!! Guess what. I love you oodles!! Hehehe
      Thanks for the love big sexy!

      I love your dragon tatts. You have oodles! Hahaha. I’m so funny:)

      MWA!!!

    • Ooohhh!! Hahaha. Speechless right now. 😅

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