Poignant to the point of poetic perfection Thomas .. ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐👍👍

This has a immense warmth to it.
Much enjoyed.
regards
james

Hi Thomas.
I completely agree with Nev.
I also liked how you specified 12 years old.
Gave perspective to the reader.

Powerfully penned, Thomas. Excellent write my friend, this one pulled at these old heartstrings of mine. Amazing work. Appreciate you.

Damian

Hello Thomas. Your writing pulls me in every time. As though I’m standing right by you, living through what you wrote. Marvelous description, memorable write.

Beautiful write. The ending really got to me. Thank you for sharing.

I appreciate that.

First you took us to a memory. Then that last line. And that is the reason the memory matters. Beautiful. I knew mine wouldn’t live long, still hurts he’s gone

Brilliant.

This is great writing Nev.
I loved how descriptive it is and how it connects with the soul.
How we all try to live for something greater while time wastes away.

Enjoy Miami!
Im headed to Tampa in a couple of weeks!
Safe travels!

Powerfully penned, Neville. Excellent write my friend. Have fun on your adventure and I hope you find inspiration. Be safe out there. Appreciate you.

Damian

Neville, this poem was an artistic and soulful masterpiece. I felt the aging poet contemplating his life and its direction. Truly a grandly composed art poem that took me to places my heart often finds itself as I grown older. This resonates with me like a jazz song.

John

This personally touches me deep, words I need to listen and hear today…

“I don’t just look and see,
but I watch
and I savour and I learn
and then I try
to hoard what I find”

How beautifully wise this is, I want to try and be like this always but I seem to fail sometimes, you wrote it with genuine and true feelings. another sailing another journey another experience 🌞 🌊 and don’t worry about me I won’t fly anywhere, I will be still here 😁

I just got the thumbs up to travel which was touch and go for a while because of my bad chest but now that I’ve got the go ahead, its all systems go .. I travel to London tomorrow & then get a flight to Miami .. from there I jump ship and head for South America eventually ending up in Chile .. Isn’t it amazing what lengths some folk will go for a bit of inspiration 😎.. I’m so glad You found this one .. You reading this particular little scribble is an honour in itself .. Oh’ and just for the record, we all fail sometimes and some of us more than others .. and also for the record, I do worry about You & wish You were were elsewhere, somewhere safe & maybe with me .. My goodness, would we ever stop writing .. Take care while I am away my very dearest G Girl & don’t let them get you down .. Your mate, Me .. Neville 😎🌻💛⭐🌟👍

I wish so many in my country weren’t so eager to bury history and relive it. Those 2 minutes of silent respect are a beautiful gift for the memory that shouldn’t be laid to rest

We wear the poppies but the message has been forgotten, and reinterpreted, with sinister overtones. War is hell, but it goes on.
Regards James

Few lines but it is a little gem here, a little masterpiece… You couldn’t say it better, specially the opening, when nature is participating in it, to proof it is the Truth. Bravo ✨my very dear friend YOU😎🌻

Powerfully penned, Neville. Excellent write my friend, this has layers and I love layers. Such a powerful message. Appreciate you.

Damian

Brilliant work.

“Carved from sheet metal / and painted in matt black” is a striking detail. It grounds the tribute without sentimentality.

This is deep, Thomas. Great writing.

Powerfully penned, Thomas. That’s it in a nutshell. Excellent write my friend. Appreciate you.

Damian

This has got that certain ouch factor Thomas .. so ragged & real .. write on sir .. poetry needs you .. Neville 😎👍

Ouch. There’s a lot rolled into this one. But the short pieces seem to be the most hard hitting, I’ve found

A great truth compelling as it is dark.
Regards
James

With an original touch and a Bukowskian pen you gave us a sip of yourself. Well done, Thomas!

Fantastic piece. Well said Thomas.

Thanks

Thanks

Wow this is powerful! Honest and speaking the truth as it IS, maybe in that way it opens more eyes to see.