This reads as those thoughts whilst falling asleep, the tone somewhere between whisper and silence. We all pay the toll man in the end, but self awareness is the biggest coin in the purse. Delicate and beautiful write.

Beautifully word smithed thoughts. I especially liked

“A child rose and warned,
the air here bites.
So I lifted a mist of mercy,
and veiled myself
in its scent.”

Well done 🌼

Your insight and depth of vision here is deep and filled with contemplative beauty. Loved this so much I read it twice. I wanted, needed, to absorb this in my soul as I read. This is truly a work of poetic art that speaks deeply of dreams that await and those that are signs of what fate holds ahead. Truly a remarkable poem.

John

Brilliantly penned, Roma. Wow, simply amazing write my friend. Superb storytelling nicely illustrated by tight imagery. Excellent work. Appreciate you.

Damian

Thank you, Damian. Your words mean a great deal. I hoped the imagery would echo that hazy, in-between space where dreams and reflection meet. I’m so glad the story and atmosphere carried through.

This is one of the best things posted on this site. I’m sure you hear often enough that you are a really good writer, but understand that it is a fact. I’ve been on so many sites over the years and have developed a particular eye for what is truly good writing consistently. You do so.
Skill is second to having the inner eye for seeing writes play out in a visionary style. This does. There are thousands of wonderful poems out there. But they don’t pull the reader in deeply, immersed. But this one is why readers get hooked.
Outstanding write, Romaj.

Thank you so much, Styxian! I’m really honored this piece resonated with you. It came from a mix of dream imagery and reflection, so it’s wonderful to hear the vision pulled you in. Your kind words mean a lot and inspire me to keep exploring my writing.

Roma. Just wow, I wanted this to keep going!
It’s also very alluring to me.
It pulls you in and guides you through the entire read.

Spectacular write:)

Well done! An apt poem for this liminal season. 🌼

It takes a rare skill set to verse a formal poem. Colour me impressed.

Hi Rob,
Thank you! After trying my hand at this, I’ve realized that writing formal poetry is a lot harder than it looks, haha. I’m really glad my attempt still read well — that means a great deal to me. I’ve always admired the discipline and musicality of formal verse, so your words truly resonate. It’s very much appreciated.

This is one magnificent piece Romaj. Beautiful, atmospheric, transcending, mesmerizing. You’re a very talented poetess.

Outstanding piece. The rhyme scheme is right on, and the meter flows really well. Lastly, the story told plays out like a lilting song. You are surely gifted at writing.
keep doing what you do, you’re quite good at it.

It’s always a treasure reading your poems. The rhyming is fantastic and the story too.
I loved the stanza about the quiet song!
You made this look easy. Great piece chica!

Thank you so much! I’m really glad you enjoyed it– and especially that the stanza about the quiet song stood out to you. I had so many different versions of that one, so I’m thrilled it still came through the way I hoped. It definitely wasn’t as easy as it looks, haha, but your kind words make it feel worth the effort!

Brilliantly penned, Roma. Excellent flow my friend with your precise trademark imagery on display. I dig this! Appreciate you.

Damian

Thank you so much, Damian! I really appreciate your kind words. I’m glad the imagery and flow resonated with you–it means a lot coming from you. Always grateful for your support!

I read this twice to bask in the wonder and transcendence of your poem. The imagery tied together into a dream of exquisitely woven artfully crafted tapestry of high poetic art. I could feel this deep in the marrow of my being. From start to finish this is an impressionist beauty as eloquent as it is profound. The ending felt like a release of your unbounded spirit. A celestial dance of unfettered freedom. Superbly composed.

John

Thank you so much, John. Your words are truly humbling. I’m thrilled the imagery and rhythm resonated so deeply. It means a great deal that you could feel the “tapestry” of the poem in that way. Your description of the ending as a celestial dance beautifully captures what I hoped to convey. I really appreciate your generous and insightful reading

Brilliantly penned, Roma. Into the book it belongs! Excellent imagery, felt like I was riding shotgun. Any automotive enthusiast would love this joyride. Appreciate you.

Damian

I love the determination in this. It has a come what may feel to it.
Sometimes not knowing the answers to everything feels scary but it also opens up more possibilities.
Sometimes not knowing brings wonderful surprises you never saw coming. They crash into you and change your life.
That’s all part of discovering yourself and finding out what you’re made of.
I enjoyed this roadtrip!

This is very clever. It tells of the journey quite well, taking the reader along steadily. Purposed.
Solid write, thoroughly.

hello lovely poetess I get it this is really good the love machine keeps humming while we get ranover or we keep running from this speed demon out to kill us love is tragedy but without it would be emptiness I am up for the fight with this demon great write ❤️

Impeccable metaphors and quite the philosophical road trip. It’s good to have a journey to end towards; but it’s the journey, which matters, in the end.