Okay, that is gut-wrenching. To lay there and live a slow death that you did not sign up for. Not right at all.
This is executed well

Thanks for the thoughtful comment Fia.

It’s not right and it’s not wrong , it’s just the way it is.Like everything in life,even suffering is impermanent.

🙏

Quite moving..thank you for sharing

I’ve often felt that pain is preferable to apathy. That quiet passing out of space. This haunts & hurts. So often the case, & always hard

First the Technical: Excellent consistency with meter, beautifully executed rhyme.
Composition: Incredible depth. As Willow noted, the piece reflects a falling away, a loss of touch and intimacy with no explanation. It’s a death of sorts, and you’ve painted it perfectly. Really well done.

Great write Fia.

I think we’d agree we aren’t our bodies.
Somewhere in the spaces between our cells , our atoms, is our consciousness…but that’s not us either.
We cling to our notion of self but really are non self.Nothing.

Phenomenally penned, Fia. This was a powerful write my friend, I think our soul is our mind. It makes sense to me anyways. Appreciate you.

Damian

The Heart & Soul is everything to a person’s existence. The brain is just there to put it into words. Great piece Fia. xo

I hope you didn’t drink the entire bottle.
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Beautifully penned, P.G. Love the flow and wordplay my friend. Used to like Tequila, even better was Mezcal. Of course those days are long gone, I wasn’t able to do moderation very well. Anyways a great write. Appreciate you.

Damian

Cool piece P.G..Creative. Just don’t overdo it with the hard stuff! And I don’t mean Don’s member!! xxxo

There is so much to unpack here: the not-quite-healthy relationship that just feels so good, too good. The conflicting knowledge that you seem all too aware of: /My head is telling me to drink more, my liver screams “GET IT TOGETHER!”/ Been there, done that too many times. Vodka was my liquor of choice, and Stoli was my dear friend (along with Camels) for a good while many years ago. The fact that the knowledge is there speaks volumes to you as a person. Excellent write! <3 Echo

Really seems to be a struggle to get the formatting to stay the same. Strike two. 😠

Lol, take two, and take three to get the picture aligned. I make simple things hard. Its a gift.

But more importantly, thank you for your sweet compliment. Fools are getting rarer but players are out there in record numbers. Nice to meet another of the vanishing breed. 🌼

I swear to all things fuzzy, if I could get that bookmark function to work, this would be well & truly bookmarked! Amen & pass the bottle! Beautiful…

Thanks reading and sharing your thoughts. Its true, “Those that have it at any level are lucky and blessed.”