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Read MoreHow can I competeShe had trained you for her desiresShe tells you to count before you beginYou take deep breaths, trembling You either fear heror you desire her Lust or disgustRides you hard She tells you she wants you to play something...
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Thank you, Jacob ;))
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Fia….I thought it was more about a femdom sorta thing….still good either way.👍
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Haha..well you never know when I could pop a poem like that out. Thank you, Peter;))
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I just can’t imagine any hot blooded music loving fella NOT enjoying this & DEEPLY .. Bravo Mistress F .. Neville 😎👍
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Thank you, Neville.(big smile here);))
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excellent write
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Thank you, twoffthythree ;))
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Beautifully penned, Fia. Music is a seductive lady, excellent write my friend. Appreciate you, cuz.
Damian
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Thank you, Damian;)) Music is exactly that,
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Fia this was smoking. I love piano music and this is one of the most creative poems on seduction of a pianist I have read. I felt the flame of his helplessness because her womanly powers. Sizzling.
John
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Thank you, John;))
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Read MorePoison left her lips "it's you that I detest"His mouth bent towards his chest.He died,Was for the best.
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There is a great pain in words
And there is also joy.A really moving piece.
Regards James
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Emily Dickinson once said “Words have the power to kill, they also have the power to heal.”
And here it is the former that occurs.
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There is nothing quite like the sting of harsh well placed words. We humans can make weapons out of everything. Still, an ugly truth is less harmful than a pretty lie. Excellent write!
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Given the state of the world, there are consequences to actions.
Nice spill.
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Read MoreI had time to give it some thoughtjust who the fuck I think I amsuddenly the floodgates stoppedthe sky opened upand I could see the lightI'm sent to bring sexy back to insanitywhile having critics talk shit about meyou...
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I’m a mad, mad man… that is catchy.
It seems that it states take me or leave me, but I am not changing. -
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Well like the great philosopher Popeye once said “I Yam What I Yam” haha.
Thanks for the read. Much appreciated.
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Read MoreAI Art Generated by Goldenmyst Where the Sacred Cenote Remembers the Tasteof Forbidden Jicama Under a Borrowed Moon A marital spat erupts between the Mayan creator, Hunab Ku, and the creatrix of humankind because he cheated on her with a...
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I like how you blend Mayan and African in this. The gods would never be as severally punished as a human would. Then she found or they found someone for her. To make her behave. I like it.
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Love your thoughts on my story my friend. Indeed the human woman seems to be the most punished. Very glad you enjoyed how I put African and Mayan cultures together in my story. Yes indeed she was made to behave. Thank you so much for reading my friend.
John
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Deep gratitude. I very much appreciate your reflections on my story. Love your impressions on my story. Really means so much to me. Great thanks.
John
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This is such a truly mesmerizing story. I was captivated from the very first line. You weave a vivid, beautiful tale of myth, transformation, and empowerment.
Tayanna’s journey from mortal victim to spiritually and physically reborn heroine is stunning, and I love the playful ending where she cleverly draws her distracted partner back to their love and intimacy. A brilliant blend of legend, heart, and agency.
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Your words here are true to my story, Romaj. Your review is so excellently written and so perceptive as you followed the story’s threads with amazing insight. I thank you from my heart for your keen understanding of the underlying themes held within my tale. Your comment clearly reflects your in depth reading of this tale and I am truly grateful to you.
John
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This, to me, is a story of trials and the wisdom that is gained from them for Tayanna. It’s also about second chances and forgiveness. The potion itself seems a lock and key. Well done, John.
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Thank you so much Tim. I love your keen observations here. You really have a great mind that sees into the heart of the themes of my stories. I am forever grateful to you for really delving deep into the meaning of my tale. And very grateful for your behind the scenes advice on revisions that made the story so much clearer and better. Most grateful.
John
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Marvelous piece here John. You have the gift of telling a story and keeping us intrigued from start to finish. A story I would love to see converted to film. Bravo!
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Deep gratitude my friend for your reading of my story. Your words on my prose are taken to heart. Much appreciated especially your thoughts on how this could make a good film. Thank you so much.
John
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Read MoreLooking for the vulnerableLooking for the weakNaivety beyond innocenceFeeling special and uniqueCautiously hunting for prey They skillfully set their baitWaiting for their next victimTo feel the fate of their hateThese monsters devouringIndulging in the feastSharing with other predatorsWild out of...
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This flow is nice, and meaning is not lost in the rhyme. I like it.
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Thank you..it’s short and to the point for sure..hope you are doing well..good to hear from you
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Another piece that leans me in the direction of what is happening with the protection of those involved
in the trafficking…Despicable people protected by their wealth.
They are diseased and need to be put out of their ecstasy…
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Thanks for taking time to comment as well..appreciate it
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It is quite disturbing how the wealthy can buy anything and then cover up their evil doings..sadly I feel the victims will never have the justice they deserve and everything that has happened to them is just a talking point during this moment in time and will be forgotton in the near future..its also sad how these poor victims are used as weapons from our leaders from both sides of the aisle and at the end of the day most political leaders don’t care about the actual victims just the story they can narrate by using them
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Amen to that.
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I love this piece. You create an excellent and interesting metaphor and you carry it through from beginning to end.
It really works and we feel the relationship between the poem’s subject and the piano.
nicely done, Fia.
j.