Ornithophile

Kelly Scheppers
6 months, 3 weeks ago

I’m big on the closing lines of a poem. What an impact they make. It’s the impression your reader walks away with, that stays in your head like a song you can’t shake. The lost loves and the unrequited loves are always on my hit list. You nailed this one, Damian…so good!
- Damian DeadLove
  6 months, 3 weeks ago
  
  Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Kelly. So glad you connected with the write my friend. I agree with you, coming from a lyrical background, I always love a good line. But the beginning and ending are very important indeed. Appreciate you.
  
  Damian
Fia Naturie
6 months, 3 weeks ago

This was hidden? Man, this was screaming to be let out. “No winners because the race was fixed.” Yup.
This is a great piece, cuz
- Damian DeadLove
  6 months, 3 weeks ago
  
  Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Fia. So glad you connected with the write my friend. I wrote this before joining DU. I love that line as well. It was screaming to be let out. Appreciate you, cuz.
  
  Damian
Styxian
6 months, 3 weeks ago

The last stanza is a real ass kicker! The rhyme scheme is cool too. It’s obvious that you care about your results. It shows in your craftings. This is thought provoking, but not heavy. Well done Damian.
- Damian DeadLove
  6 months, 3 weeks ago
  
  Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Mark. So glad you connected with the write my friend. It was an ass kicker, I penned this during a time of self-therapy and reflection. I’ve always cared, always executing is another story. This was a cool discovery, because I had forgotten about it. lol. Appreciate you.
  
  Damian
Adelphina
6 months, 3 weeks ago

I too enjoyed the rhyme scheme. Everyone can relate to this. We’ve all been there.
When you both know it was over a few months back!
Great write amigo!
- Damian DeadLove
  6 months, 3 weeks ago
  
  Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Adel. So glad you connected with the write my friend. It’s a relatable story indeed. Appreciate you.
  
  Damian
Crimsin
6 months, 3 weeks ago

wow dearest Damian so much power and passion in this I am floored ❤️great write…
- Damian DeadLove
  6 months, 3 weeks ago
  
  Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Brenda. So glad you connected with the write my friend. It was a very reflective time in my life to say the least. Appreciate you.
  
  Damian
Neville
6 months, 3 weeks ago

Now aint that the truth so bloomin well poemed .. Say it like it is why don’tcha eh .. Great ink Damian & subsequently awarded Nev’s dubble 👍👍
- Damian DeadLove
  6 months, 3 weeks ago
  
  Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Neville. So glad you connected with the write my friend. Sometimes you gotta say it loud and proud. Honored to receive the dubble. Appreciate you.
  
  Damian
RomaJ
6 months, 3 weeks ago

This is dark, deep, and brilliant, Damian. I’m glad you dug it out of the vault! The honesty in this poem is cutting, and the final lines–“instead of owning we rented / while love got strangled” –are a phenomenal, memorable finish. A wicked good read.
- Damian DeadLove
  6 months, 3 weeks ago
  
  Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Roma. So glad you connected with the write my friend. Those final lines are my favorite as well. It was penned in a time of self-reflection, and getting to really know myself. Without my addiction clouding my vision. Appreciate you.
  
  Damian
Willow
6 months, 3 weeks ago

“another moment dies”

That’s the thing people lose sight of. Once the moment is gone…it’s gone. What we make of it bears a lot of weight. I’d rather carry honest weight than the baggage of pretense. I’m glad you found this one. It needed to breathe, my friend
- Damian DeadLove
  6 months, 2 weeks ago
  
  Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Willow. So glad you connected with the write my friend. Spot on in your analysis as always, it did need to breathe a little. It was simmering on the stove in the word kitchen. lol. Appreciate you.
  
  Damian
Wally
6 months, 3 weeks ago

Damian, great rhyme and flow while delivering a strong message.
Excellent work sir.
- Damian DeadLove
  6 months, 2 weeks ago
  
  Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Wally. So glad you connected with the write my friend. Appreciate you.
  
  Damian
Visions_of_Insanity
6 months, 3 weeks ago

Hard hitting piece. So true my friend. kick-ass write Damian.
- Damian DeadLove
  6 months, 2 weeks ago
  
  Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Keith. So glad you connected with the write my friend. Appreciate you.
  
  Damian

Willow
6 months, 3 weeks ago

The moments like this are like balloons in the heart. Beautifully buoyant. This is what life should look like as a child…
Sam Dickens
6 months, 3 weeks ago

I really am touched by this, probably because your childhood sounds a bit like my own. How marvelous it would be if we could all be born into solid, loving families, but alas–not in this world does it happen. Still, despite the lousy hand that life often deals, beautiful flowers may bloom from the poorest soil. I played in leaves, too… and mud puddles.
Wally
6 months, 3 weeks ago

It’s a heart tugging piece, the harsh realities of the world where adults strip away the innocence of the young.
Thank you for sharing.
Paula Jobi
6 months, 3 weeks ago

Thanks Wally.

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