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Read MoreGhetto Lions Her lover man, drunk on romance,is led by her down skid row.He is a sad-eyed prophet of gloomwho topples imaginary kingdomsin his game of emotional chess.He never quite captures the king. He hugs her, his angel of midnight dreams.His...
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Damian, I am most grateful for your seeing into the layers within this piece. And also very grateful for your appreciation of the imagery and storytelling in my poem. I appreciate you too, very much.
John
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Tremendous work. Powerful and vivid. Excellent.
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Thank you so much Thomas. Very much appreciated your observations on my poem. Very grateful.
John
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This is so worth reading. The grittiness and inner searching, as well as a lonely desire dresses this up nice. I get a real California children of the night feel to this. So well done. Great poem.
Did you mean as he combs her golden tresses?
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Thank you so much Tim. You did see into the heart of my poem with a keen insight into its meaning. Love your words here. You have brought joy into my night. And yes I did indeed meaning he combs. Thank you so much for pointing that out. You really helped a lot with that. Have a great night.
John
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Damian DeadLove wrote a new post
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Read MoreWriting all my fears on an empty page Needing to share these random thoughts Looking for common ground to engage Never found it hard to connect the dots Chasing dreams in a game of chance I’m a realist when it comes to limitations Sure it...
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I liked this, Damian.
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Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Adagio. So glad you connected with the write my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Oh, so totally resonates. I don’t know where I would be without my proverbial pen. And I spent far too many years perched in neutral…only to discover there is no such thing. Either your ass is leaning in one direction or your nose is. I prefer staying informed & walking the path that suits me. Shadows & all. And i find like souls along the way when living authentic. Consider this one on my reading list with emphasis, my friend
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Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Willow. So glad you connected with the write my friend. I wasn’t in neutral, but my wheels were always spinning. Either wound up in the ditch of life, or lost on an alcohol induced detour. Nowadays I’m living authentic as well, there’s shadows down every path I’ve found. Being aware and informed allows one to read the situation better. Thanks for the list.. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Mary. So glad you connected with the write my friend. Agreed, there is always more to the story. Appreciate you.
Damian
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That’s beautifully reflective—wisdom framed not as some lofty concept, but as lived experience layered over time. The imagery of seasons and fences evokes quiet contemplation, hesitation, even resilience. That last line? A soft unraveling of illusion. It reads like a quiet reckoning.
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Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, PAR. So glad you connected with the write my friend. You’re spot on. I believe wisdom is acquired through time and experience. Always enjoy your commentary. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Superb work. Powerful.
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Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Thomas. So glad you connected with the write my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Read MoreA haunting beauty you are moonlit, mortality still flowing with passion. A haunting romanticism our shared lips are, bathing together in crimson moonlight. Your kiss lingers well beyond death, and beyond our last cold moment. And there's a dominance in your kiss... Hopefully not eternal...
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And there’s a dominance in your kiss…
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I love the gothic style here.
Very powerful and I envy such a beauty…haunting.
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Powerfully penned, Daniel. An intriguing write my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Read MoreYour inconsistencies are consistentHappy yet state your sadAngry but seem to be gladRelaxed but wound tightWant to be gentle yet you biteNo one understandsNo one took the timeNo one gave a shitAlways left behindWeeping from rageSpilling into the calm...
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Intriguing…
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Thank you, willow
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I like the contrast you used in some verses. Dark thoughts indeed. Well done, Fia!
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Thank you, M.E appreciate that
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Powerfully penned, Fia. Into the book it belongs! Amazing write my friend, with dark vibes very present. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Thank you, Damian. was in the zone.
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Thank you, Adira;))
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Fantatic!
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Thank you, Adagio
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G’Mornin’, Fia 🌤️
Good title, and what a great lead-in with V1’s frustrating contradictions setting the mood for what’s to come (L2, make it “you’re” sad).
Boy howdy! You sure know how to express the angst so many of us have had to endure and overcome; yet, it seems some never do … sadly so.You’re such a creative writer, Ria: I admire your keen ability to weave vivid imagery and emotion throughout every verse and in the use of spot-on rhymes, timely line-breaks, and smooth flow.
Excellent wrap-up verse, too. For rhyme’s sake with “despair,” consider using “there” rather than “here” (just a thought).“Wake, wake from this despair! (great poe-esque touch)
It is me you’re talking to …
no one else is there.”Fia, you’re such a joy to read and share with. 🌈
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Thank you so much for the compliment and comment. Richard I appreciate it
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Oh, sure thing, Fia!
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Yes, it has been changed. Ty ;))
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You misunderstood, Fia … I meant to change L4 to “there”. Not L2, which was fine as “despair”.
So “despair” and “there” rhyme.
(like this)
Still, you find me in your dreams
Wake, wake from this despair
It is me you’re talking to
No one else is there.
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Very captivating.
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Thank you, CasketSharpe;))
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Thank you, Steven;))
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Read MorePlease hold me when the bombs drop. Till there’s no skin left on my flesh. Keep smiling till our time’s up. I need you close when I turn to ash.This war isn’t yours or mine but still ours for...
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I wish this didn’t resonate so deeply with me. Sigh…
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Thank you Willow!
Just listened to the song you and Mary made on YouTube. My god it’s so good…
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An eye-opening write! Unfortunately true and real.
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Powerfully penned, Drieks. Nice arrangement, and you’re just a phenomenal lyricist my friend. So relevant in present times, and so unfortunately true. Excellent work. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Thank you for your kind words Damian! 🙏🏻
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Outstanding!
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Thank you Adagio!
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Thank you so much Mary 🙏🏻
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Intriguing write, John. This piece has layers and lots of depth my friend. Amazing imagery and storytelling. Appreciate you.
Damian