Powerful. Vivid and sharp.

Clever along with the confusion of “knowing” how things will go. This is short but sharp as hell.

This reads like playing chess.
Or even tennis.
Well done!

Powerfully penned, Sam. Excellent write with a little back and forth going on my friend. Nicely done. Appreciate you.

Damian

I agree it is like a chess move. really good Sam

You always could pen something lovely when you allow yourself. ♥️ nice poem

keep trying ..

This is kinda where my mind has been lately. I recently took a lower paying, more physically demanding job just to access these very feelings. I just wanted feel what real living is like again. You’ll only get what you give, and many of us have to give a lot more just to get a little, but these are the conditions that shape the poet. Keep trying, and keep in mind that more people see you than you realize! Life is hard fkn work! But I know you know this, because you are a poet!!

Thankfully you, we all, have access to let it all out in writing. That is our strongest voice. God knows that creative writing really helped me become who I am. I still have a vocal glitch, that hits me whenever it wants, but it isn’t a handicap. I have learned to be confident regardless. Writing gives us a super power. You will win the battles Fia.
Awesome write.

Powerfully penned, Fia. Another excellent write with many deep layers my friend. This one has a musing vibe while turbulence is stirring beneath the surface. I concur with Mark. Amazing read as always. Appreciate you, Cuz.

Damian

Thank you for this encouraging writing, dear Fia!
Settling with what you have already achieved, means standing still. But trying again and again, getting up after falling and trying anew is a brave way of progress and self development. Only doing so you can reach out for the stars!

willow… wow… when I heard this its as if I was sitting on that porch listening to the the story… amazing

Beautiful. I love this. Powerful. Vivid and sharp.

First off, the rhyme scheme is on point. I can tell you really had to pull some crafty words to make the rhyme and tempo stay true. You succeeded. The story within is great, it follows through well and ends with a great mood.
Awesome Willow.

I just listened to the recording! The music matched the tone of your write perfectly.
Even the voice! I’m all for letting go of dead weight in any write. Nicely done:)

Powerfully penned, Willow. Another excellent write that exercises demons while telling this tale of survival my friend. The music sets the mood as the voice delivers the truth while speaking your words with precision. Goosebumps on this one. Amazing read/listen as always. Appreciate you, Sis.

Damian

Hi Peter

How are you?
You expressed so much in few lines.

Jessy Jacob

It’s the ones who insist they’re fine when clearly they’re not that scare me. We humas are very fragile indeed

Well you’re right! And sometimes we think we know them, until we realize that we don’t. The mind is each of our own little universe, it’s so vast. Some people get off track along the way.

Powerfully penned, Peter. Another excellent write with lots of layers my friend. No one is immune to time and the effects it has on the mind. Thanks for sharing. Amazing read as always. Appreciate you.

Damian

Willow…the words od not come to me and I am a chatter box. Amazing spill of emotions.

Powerfully penned, Willow. Another excellent write with deep layers of emotion and honest storytelling my friend. This one hits harder than a freight train. I concur with everyone above. You took this one to another level. Outstanding read as always. Appreciate you, Sis.

Damian

You can feel desperation and perseverance in every line. Simply stunning.

Thank you, Peter

Thank you, Light 💕

Excellent. Obviously I enjoy story poems the most. It’s in the way it brings the real world into something we all can sense too.
Life is like that, and so writing can be a journal of experience too. This write fills that niche really well.
You are hitting them out of the park a bunch!

This flows like a cascading waterfall.
So much power in each line that it pushes into the next.
Just wow.