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    Neruda's Lips

    Neruda’s Lips   I have flayed your body with my tongue of fire, suckled your youthful breasts with lust and desire, eaten your musky whispers with the deadliest of sins, and all the common words of my peasant’s pen.   You are the poetry of my land, the dark earth...

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    • This poem beautifully channels Neruda’s sensual spirit. The union of passion, earth, and language. The imagery feels both intimate and elemental, echoing the way Neruda made love and nature inseparable.

      It’s a stirring tribute that captures his essence…beautifully penned.

      • Neruda’s love sonnets are some of the best poetry ever written (IMHO). And yes, exactly, love and nature are inseparable, flowing in and around each other. Thank you, RomaJ for your lovely and muchly appreciated comment and visit. You are always welcome to walk through my poetry.

    • This has so much passion in this. I agree with Romaj beautifully penned.

    • Damn!
      Excellent! You had me at “flayed”. What a vivid, well placed word.

      • I love that word (flayed). It felt and sounded right to use it in this poem. Thanks for your observation and for the fine comment.

    • You turned the poem into something else with this, “and all the common words of my peasant’s pen.” Following the next verse, IF you didn’t brilliantly did this, it would have been just a strong sensual poem, but with how amazingly You brought a higher level with the last two line of verse one, then the gorgeous verse two, is what makes the poem very special to me, exploring and expressing a deeper connection. I believe Pablo would admire this🤍

      • One of the things I love about Neruda’s poetry is his use of everyday words. With them, he word paints images, metaphors and a feeling of LIFE that exists and surrounds us with HOPE.

        Light, thank you so much for your insight and understanding of what I wanted (no, needed) to express. If Neruda were still alive, I think I would be tempted to send this poem to him.

    • It was/is my pleasure to “whisper” and a big Thank You to the Roman Goddess, daughter of Cupid and Psyche. It’s not often I get a comment from royalty. Not sure I am worthy, but it is appreciated muchly.

    • You are most welcome my friend🌸 and consider your poem sent, his soul is still out there, just call Him 😊

    • Yes, please post it. I would love to read what, how you see Neruda’s love sonnets.

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    Sucker Punched

    the world has pausedsilence hammers at the sensesheart still beating...barely...does it even matter...it flutters unheard the universe is screamingbanshee howl of despairsucking life from hopea wildly spinning black holedevouring beauty in its path I am collateral damageinsignificant to the true lossa...

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    • Poetic oxygen is hanging by a fingernail in our world. But! There is hope. Well done, Willow.

    • Thought on this one Lady, maybe to much. We think it would had hit even harder if posted closer to Halloween

      • To be honest, I hadn’t even thought of Halloween. 😂 Just nursing a bit of pain. I actually didn’t think on it much at all. This was a write and drop piece. I tend to do that when emotion is high. Thank you for your thoughts, ME

    • Extraordinarily compelling ink ma’am .. I was hooked from the off and enjoyed the ride write to the very opposite end and no kidding .. Write on my fine literary friend .. Neville

      • I’m not entirely convinced my muse will give me much time off. If you saw my unposted drafts…egads. Thank you for the support on this one

    • Powerfully penned, Willow. Excellent write my friend with precise imagery and wordplay. Felt this one! Appreciate you.

      Damian

      • I felt it too…like a baseball bat to the crotch. There were layers in this one. World and…life, if you get my drift. Thank you, my friend. Your continued support means a lot

    • The way you combined nature and human in this piece is breathtaking. We should not be used as collateral damage for the error of polluting the air. That is one way I took this piece.
      Then the ones that are cast aside unnoticed.. That is sad, but I believe that there is someone noticing them. They may not know what to do to bring more light in their black hole.
      Just thoughts I got from your piece.

      • You’re not far off the mark on this one. As I said to Damian,👆 there are layers to it. Where it takes the reader is between them and their imagination. Thank you for your thoughts, Fia. Much appreciated

    • the same as for all of us – some care
      thank you Willow

    • Wow. This is a cigarette and a shot write. It is almost bitter, almost defeatist. Yet it also feels like you’re scoffing at the processes too. You need a seashell necklace while writing like this. Reminding you of what’s salty out there.

      • Well, I don’t smoke and I’m a tragic lightweight drinker. Just a full blood hippy who lives by the Moon. Still, I get your drift. I guess when I was writing this, I was reminding myself that my little whimpers are fairly insignificant in the grand scheme of things. Thank you for your thoughts, Styxian

    • Willow…you had me from the first line and held me there until the last.
      Message delivered and your mission accomplished.
      The universe never pauses.Everything rises and ceases,nothing permanent….thank God.Imagine a permanent Trump.

      • A permanent Trump sounds like eternal hell. It’s bad enough dealing with it now. And we still have years ahead. I don’t even like the contemplate what will happen next. It’s like living in a minefield. Thank you for your thoughts, Peter

    • This is dark with a lot of reality in it too. You nailed it with your silent hammers.
      What ever the subject matter your writing is it’s articulate and thought provoking.

      • We can’t always hear the blow coming. We just find ourselves flat on our back in agony. Such is our world at present. Thank you for your thoughts, Adelphina

    • Brilliant use of languge and great imagery.

    • damn…incredible write.

    • The world is all too willing to leave the hurt ones behind. Great ink friend.

      • Truth and facts right there. We gotta pick each other up. Thank you, my friend

    • We see each other. We hear each other. We fall together. We rise together. Thank you for seeing, Volupta

  • Bloody Phones

    I hold the phone look at the screenAnd wonder wheremy mind has been.

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  • On our group “BACK TO POETIC BASICS” we’lll soon be covering anything poetry anyone wants to address.

    We will meet here once a week each Wednesday beginning October 22nd, 2025. Our first session will begin with the Sonnet.
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