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Fia Naturie posted in the group News and Suggestions
Welcome to another edition of Stars Rite News and Updates!
As we ease into the summer months, I’d be remiss if I didn’t remind you to carry the essentials every poet and writer needs.
If you’re old-school like some of us, don’t forget your trusty pen, a small notepad, and maybe even a pair of sunglasses if you’re trying to stay incogni…Read More![Profile Photo]()
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Read MoreAs you gaze and come to recognize the black fire within me, and realize you're now claimed, you say, "no gothic rose can be dominated! ...
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Powerfully penned, Daniel. Incredible write my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Read MoreSeveral weeks at sea and no flower as yet. The crew was still in high spirits due to the captain’s demeanor Vivian suspects. She has been watching him since the day they set sail. The way he treats his crew...
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Brilliantly penned, Fia. Love this story my friend, the dialogue definitely gives it a 40’s vibe. Fantastic write. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Thank you and I appreciate your comments.
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Love what you’re doing, girl. Honestly, this feels much older than the 40’s to me. Darrius feels somehow like a pirate, and Vivian his captive. Of course, she isn’t a prisoner. Or is she? This is intentional.
And Darrius is such an egotistical SOB. What guy tells a woman that everyone on board can see her intentions? That’s a guy who is overly confident, a guy who wants to make things more difficult for himself, who creates a challenge from a gift.,
Love the dialogue. There’s limited description and imagery here, which is actually where you might more specifically date the scene as if that really mattered. My one suggestion would be backing off spoon feeding your reader about the thoughts and feelings of your characters. Let them act it out, and we can all come to our own conclusions.
You’ve got a lot to cover in two more chapters. The centerpiece of this mysterious journey has yet to be exposed. What would be the purpose of searching out a flower under the urgent circumstance of war?
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I will take your suggestion to consideration. Enjoying your take on this.
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Read MoreThe lady of sorrow does not possess a name. For the sake of this poem, I will call her: Lady Sorrow. There's another time in another place, where she sat deep between the slopes of a ravine. It was overcast, and so was the spirit in her eyes. Where...
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Wow, this has Edgar Allen Poe written all over it.
Daniel, I’m not following you into hell, so you better repent.Who am I kidding?
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You must be kidding, Meg. Repent? Never! Haha! As long as my hand and I are alive I will continue writing the hauntingly beautiful. Poe had it right, what an inspiration. So, on this story will continue and her sorrows will follow her in death. Maybe, just maybe this character will find a way out of hell, and maybe so will I…
Thanks Meg 😊
Daniel
Gothic-surrealist
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Sharp and vivid . Powerful work.
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So many parts missing
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hello dearest poet yes sadly thank you 💕
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Powerfully penned, Brenda. Thanks for sharing my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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hello dearest Damian good afternoon thank you for reading and leaving a kind comment 💕
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Superb work.
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hello dearest Thomas good afternoon thank you graciously for reading and commenting 💕
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I love no Gothic rose can be dominated. This had me along for the ride. Enjoyed this.