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Fia Naturie posted in the group βBACK TO POETRY BASICSβ
This is my Free verse
Do you hear the sun?
As the rays beat down on the ground,
It is subtle but poignant
Itβs purpose is to burn.
The exquisite heat,
does not match the coolness in your eyesDo you smell the wind?
Multicolored in its complexity
Surrounds you,
Invades your very core.
It gives you life.
Then withdraws to take your b…Read More![Profile Photo]()
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I’ll work on it. Thanks for the guidance
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You make sharing a distinct pleasure. 🙏
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very beautiful dearest Adagio ❤️
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Thank you, Brenda.
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Powerfully penned, Brenda. Excellent write my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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good evening dearest Damian thank you graciously I appreciate you very much ❤️
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All-out effort as always! Never cease to impress!
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hello dearest Daniel thank you graciously have a good day today ❤️
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Read MoreI shall not forget the moment the light died. The glow of the candle pinched. The stout wick breathes out a fluttering string in defiance of death. Β But it was time to die. It was time to breathe to death. What do we all think, When...
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hello dearest Daniel darkly brilliant write observing your thoughts on death ❤️
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Read MoreHome, the encasement of my mind and body. Its foundations cracked, its roof tiles splintered, in come the tear-showers! The only home I possess floods. Β These bones are fractured, my soul shattered. I lock my mouth of this broken home shut, never to tell its secrets. Β The...
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Beautifully imagined, Fia, an excellent effort!
Deserves a VERY strong title!
ISSUES TO CONSIDER:
1. Unnecessarily Capitalizing every line, which tends to confuse when one complete line, thought, etc; begins or ends, effectively stumbling the flow, attention, and overall magical smoothness of a poemβs captive spell.
2. Poetic voice β¦ how a poe…Read More