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    Love Sonnet LXIII

    Love Sonnet LXIII     Capturing the rhythms of love is not easy since it often come up against emotions that find time and space stacked against   it. I would love putting my hands in your dark soil, play gleefully with the feel of earth on my fingers as...

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    • That’s a beautiful expression of hope and yearning! The central metaphor of the garden, particularly the image of “putting my hands in your dark soil,” really captures a deep desire for creation and connection, even when starting “late in life.”

      • I think RomaJ, there is always the need for and desire for connections, perhaps even love. I love to garden for real . I have two gardens one where I live and another at my son’s house. Both have had good harvests this year. But as a metaphor, gardens can hold special meaning, and I can remember a time when this metaphor was alive, as was I.

        RomaJ your comments have been a delight for me, and they are appreciated by me more than you know. THANK YOU!!!

    • AWWW Valuptas, your are making me blush. I was going to go food shopping this morning but now I can’t, my face is too red. What will the neighbors think?? They will ask questions and then laugh. At some point, my face will return to normal, but until then, THANK YOU so much for being “pulled in”. OMG, I’m still blushing…. HELP!!! ;0)

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    Love Sonnet XLV

    LOVE SONNET XLV     Your lips spit fire, yet taste like Chardonnay warmed by the heat of a poem written on a summer day. A natural red allows   your words, a sensual touch and flavor as they caress my skin in a kaleidoscope of colors, each...

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    • The imagery of “lips spit fire, yet taste like Chardonnay” is such a vivid paradox, and the way you connect her kiss to both a visual “kaleidoscope of colors” and the sound of “psithurism” is beautiful. It makes the experience truly multi-sensory. Beautifully penned.

      • Your comment, RomaJ, reads like the soft sound of “psithurism”. It is appreciated and I thank you for it!!

    • Hi Ms Valuptas, I would not want your royal “whispering” (unholy or otherwise), sitting in a jail cell. How else would I receive such beautiful comments?

      For most of the poetry I write, I add music. I think it adds to the feel and meaning of the poem. Sade’s song “Kiss of Life” was a really good fit for this poem. And yes, I am “foxy”… er… I mean… damn, did I say that out loud? Actually, more “wolfy” than “foxy”. But you know, wolfs can be sly too. ;0)

      Anyway, sorry about the couch. THANK YOU for the comment, the visit, and for making my poem feel special!

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    why tell

    College first and competitive, too many conquests tried me: I gave little but smiled a lot!  Clothes a la charity shop became popular, its volunteers who ran them admired the flat-breasted touch of my body! That meant I had...

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    • Emma, this is a well narrated story of the history of your writer’s life where college took you. This glimpse into the past was quite stimulating to read. I loved how the life events unfolded and reading this story that felt like an entry for a memoir.

      John

    • Many thanks, you found the thread running through time and kindly accepted the truth of my words. There is a future to come but with pauses for self reflection. More than that, I don’t know yet! Patience or adventure!?

    • I just found this… Oh! You write, such indigo between lines.

    • weirdly, this reminds me of someone that i used to love, from afar.

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    Neruda's Lips

    Neruda’s Lips   I have flayed your body with my tongue of fire, suckled your youthful breasts with lust and desire, eaten your musky whispers with the deadliest of sins, and all the common words of my peasant’s pen.   You are the poetry of my land, the dark earth...

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    • This poem beautifully channels Neruda’s sensual spirit. The union of passion, earth, and language. The imagery feels both intimate and elemental, echoing the way Neruda made love and nature inseparable.

      It’s a stirring tribute that captures his essence…beautifully penned.

      • Neruda’s love sonnets are some of the best poetry ever written (IMHO). And yes, exactly, love and nature are inseparable, flowing in and around each other. Thank you, RomaJ for your lovely and muchly appreciated comment and visit. You are always welcome to walk through my poetry.

    • This has so much passion in this. I agree with Romaj beautifully penned.

    • Damn!
      Excellent! You had me at “flayed”. What a vivid, well placed word.

      • I love that word (flayed). It felt and sounded right to use it in this poem. Thanks for your observation and for the fine comment.

    • You turned the poem into something else with this, “and all the common words of my peasant’s pen.” Following the next verse, IF you didn’t brilliantly did this, it would have been just a strong sensual poem, but with how amazingly You brought a higher level with the last two line of verse one, then the gorgeous verse two, is what makes the poem very special to me, exploring and expressing a deeper connection. I believe Pablo would admire this🤍

      • One of the things I love about Neruda’s poetry is his use of everyday words. With them, he word paints images, metaphors and a feeling of LIFE that exists and surrounds us with HOPE.

        Light, thank you so much for your insight and understanding of what I wanted (no, needed) to express. If Neruda were still alive, I think I would be tempted to send this poem to him.

    • It was/is my pleasure to “whisper” and a big Thank You to the Roman Goddess, daughter of Cupid and Psyche. It’s not often I get a comment from royalty. Not sure I am worthy, but it is appreciated muchly.

    • You are most welcome my friend🌸 and consider your poem sent, his soul is still out there, just call Him 😊

    • Yes, please post it. I would love to read what, how you see Neruda’s love sonnets.

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