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Joe, that is just breathtaking. What an incredible catharsis. I’ve read many things about the disintegration of love, the falling away – but never anything so utterly raw and weeping as this. Such detail and emotion. The final freedom you describe is so anticlimactic, so real in its hollowness. The wound is so visible, the pain so palpable.
Second person narrative is hugely effective here. It magnifies the emotion of your piece considerably.
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Cleverly penned, Naaj. Loved the flow and amazing wordplay, it’s witty as hell my friend. Much respect. Appreciate you.
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