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Read MoreReflection Across the scuffed wood of this quiet booth,I slide a steaming mug toward your hands.You look so small, swallowed by that coat,Your eyes a restless map of practiced fear.I watch you stir the sugar, dark and deep,As steam...
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Thank you, Flatdaddy. I wholeheartedly agree with you. and I am speaking to myself (older me to younger me(
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Read MoreChocolate BunnyChatper-1The air in the lodge is thick with the scent of pine, expensive bourbon, and the rising musk of seven men in peak condition.I stand by the floor-to-ceiling windows and watch the early morning mist roll off the...
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Wow. Easter egg surprise. Nice…:))
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Hehe, thank you, Fia. Happy belated easter Sunday!!! Hope you had a fun-filled, rested weekend.
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Yes, I did. I hope you did as well.
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This was very captivating and well written. Keep it flowing.
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Thank you Casket.
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Epic .. I don’t know about you or anyone else but I’m exhausted 😎👍
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I was going to ask why you’re exhausted, then it hit me. HAHAAAA SIR!!!
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I don’t usually read for so long in one go .. I’m still recovering .. Neville 👍
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I much appreciate you for sticking through it. In this instant, I didn’t want to post over a period of dates.
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Thank you, Vision.
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This is a very powerful piece, Kay, but I would ask you not to use capital letters at the start of a line that is a continuation of the preceding line; it makes the reader stop unsure if this is part of the line above or a new thought. And use punctuation wisely, as a tool to guide the reader when needed. The better the flow, the more enjoyable is the read. This piece is very good as it is, and you need not change a thing; but try my suggestions and see how it feels.
I wonder: are you actually addressing another person — or yourself? It seems to me you are bucking up your own courage, but I could be wrong. It works either way. Nice work, my friend.
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