Hugely complex piece and I love the pic. I like how you use color to reflect emotion. Some great alliteration in this piece and the rare use of personification as well. It highlights the inner struggle as the body continues to persevere. Deep, tantalizing, thought provoking.

xoxo

Powerfully penned, Brenda. Deep write my friend. Appreciate you.

Damian

hello lovely poetess this is very interesting great write 💕

Hello Crimsin. Thank you for the feedback.

I liked this.

You’re very good a setting up intrigue and suspense

Naaj

Thank you a lot dear.

I love reading your unique and fearless poems Ms A

You spoil me with your words and I like it a lot. 🙂

🙂

hello dearest Thomas I wonder what has you sad your girlfriend or the drink and I’m curious what the bird symbolized…nice metaphoric write…💕

You know, when I drink Vodka, we’ve got dragons catching ravens. I just leave those motherfuckers alone.

Every poem tells a story, Thomas. I love it. But it does look like your girlfriend would have driven you.

Powerfully penned, Thomas. I can definitely relate my friend. Incredible write. Appreciate you.

Damian

Vodka is my demon drink but I just read yesterday that it’s good for your heart in moderation…

Translation: it’s always good to clean up from time to time. The drink will be there, you just have not be too.

Powerful confessional
Courage son

Thank you. Much appreciated.

Powerful

Holy Damn, Nick. That’s good.
(Take the ‘e’ off your ‘grab’)
I love the refrain. It emphasizes urgency. I like the conversational tone, the second person narrative… the pleading.
This is a gut-wrenching piece, and I can feel it to the core.
Really well done!

Powerfully penned, Nick. Can feel the emotion in your words, great write my friend. Appreciate you.

Damian