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Read MoreAI Summary Analysis of Part One: What a striking, immersive vision of a shattered world where tenderness and cruelty dance in the same desolate spaces. Your narrative plunges us into a post-apocalyptic America that is as haunting as it is...
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Read MoreIt had been months since they witnessed the beauty of the stars twinkling in the sky. The moon itself was already a glow before the war, and now it is lost behind the constant overcast, which lingers....
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Meg, thank you as always. Good thing it is only a freewrite and I’ll be putting it together as a more tuned first draft. I see this turning into a novella.
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Read MoreIt is post-apocolyptic America. Sometime in the 21st century, months after a thermal nuclear exchange between Russia and the United States, when nuclear winter had settled and that dark, thick veil over the sun had thinned to...
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Read MoreThe voiceless tranquility of our flame,our souls searing with passion still,yearning an isolation as silent as our emotions. This flameless romance, this desert - windswept of all fertility,populous with negativity. A fondness for solitude now,I withdraw from her as I say,"where...
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Powerfully penned, Daniel. Can feel the longing in your words my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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I can seriously feel the tension in this piece, Daniel. You’re building this beautifully. My recommendations are to look at other options for the word, ‘snow’. It becomes redundant. Also, Chloe might refer to the men in the shadows as ‘bad boys’, but Gwen and the narrator may want a more specific term – something more specific or sophisticated and relevant to the circumstances.
Your writing is compelling