This is good. Why would it be the only story you write ?

Powerfully penned, Tim. I wouldn’t give up on storytelling my friend, this is a really good story. I liked this a lot, If I’m ever in the neighborhood, we’ll take a walk. lol. Appreciate you.

Damian

Powerful work. Great storytelling.

Don’t listen to nay sayers Tim
I did that with my art stuff
Listened to the wrong people tell me my stuff wasn’t any good
Then I stopped listening and said to myself
I’m doing this for me
Fuck everyone else

Keep writing stories Tim

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I enjoyed this. I grew up with trains and hobos, so the subject is something I find very interesting. You say you’ve just started writing short stories and in my book, you’re off to a bang up start. Also, your writing is lean and correct–just the way it should be.

Powerful work. Excellent.

Time this is engaging prose that took me into the scene. You write excellent accounts and I for one am a big fan of your writing here. Truly hauntingly powerful. Starts off like an ordinary day and then full of surprises.

John

A great metaphorical poem, Thomas.

this is beautiful in its expression excellent 💕writing is very much the same for me…

great write dearest Thomas very excellent I feel you on this 💕

So many great, relatable metaphors in this. I enjoyed this.

Powerfully penned, Thomas. This is an excellent write my friend. Appreciate you.

Damian

lol. Thank you.

Interesting thought. you mean he/she will fade into obscurity if you do not think of it.

Powerfully penned, Keith. A write with lots of layers, you’re Captain Hook my friend. I mean that in a good way. Appreciate you.

Damian

Appreciate the feedback. Thanks Mary.

Once again, a great and thought provoking writing, my friend! I agree absolutely that it is a waste of time to worship revengeful and judgmental God. It only supports the authorities in power who benefit from the fear and insecurity of the masses.
Personally, I believe that there is an immeasurable and intelligent energy behind of all of creation which doesn’t care about so called sins or acts of veneration. As we are born with a thinking mind, we are challenged to decide whether to create or to destroy.
A powerful piece,hats off!