The way you structured the poem it looks calm then increases with intensity just to calm down again. There is so many twists and turns in one life that it is impossible to get the nuance of it. Between the government and the churches and the societal acceptance of things that should not be accepted. Very interesting write

This one hits like a freight train of memory, madness, and raw observation—gritty, sprawling, alive with every sense screaming at once.
I love how it doesn’t just tell a story; it drags you through the chaos of life, pain, and revelation, leaving you dazzled and unsettled in the best possible way.

It is a bit musical. I wish for a better day, each and every day. That deer lost in headlights is so true

I agree.

Thank you for putting it into words so eloquently.

Got my foot tapping away from the off to the end and back again .. Nice one too sir . Neville

Damian the fire in the eyes of those zealous followers of the pied piper elevated to guru status is painted in your poem with fire and smoke. Truly a smoking great poem that is as strong emotionally as it is rhythmically. You have real talent my friend.

John

I don’t think I’ve seen subterfuge used in poetry before and you made it fit and feel perfect.
I think many of us are feeling the same way, especially with the way the world is going.
Excellent write sir.

I can identify with this being I’m turning 64 soon. Life is how you look at it. Your strength in this shows your positive view about yourself. That’s called wisdom. Great writing, Willow.

Ahh but the mind is a fearsomely powerful weapon we often use against ourselves. Thank you, Peter

I never thought I’d be one to age gracefully. When I was young I thought for sure I’d fight it tooth and claw. But here I am, looking backwards and smiling forward. I don’t know what the days will bring, but I know what the years have brought. I’ll face them with a cup of something hot and a determination to make the best of them. Thank you, my friend

Thank you, Thomas 😊

Powerfully penned, Tim. This write hits like a freight train with it’s direct delivery my friend. A very chilling read. Appreciate you.

Damian

hello dearest Tim I love that she became one with the galaxies finally free ❤️

I admire the character at play here.

Some delicate details, very insightful imagery.

Lots to explore within the stanzas.

Carefully written, I enjoyed it. x

Tim you take one of the darkest moments in life and write it into a liberation. You have the consummate poet’s gift to transform this ending into a new beginning.

John

This is very powerful. Great work

Very beautifully written, you inspire me