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Fia Naturie posted in the group ”BACK TO POETRY BASICS”
This is my Free verse
Do you hear the sun?
As the rays beat down on the ground,
It is subtle but poignant
It’s purpose is to burn.
The exquisite heat,
does not match the coolness in your eyesDo you smell the wind?
Multicolored in its complexity
Surrounds you,
Invades your very core.
It gives you life.
Then withdraws to take your b…Read More![Profile Photo]()
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I’ll work on it. Thanks for the guidance
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You make sharing a distinct pleasure. 🙏
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![Profile picture of Damian DeadLove]()
Powerfully penned, Brenda. Excellent write my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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good evening dearest Damian thank you graciously I appreciate you very much ❤️
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All-out effort as always! Never cease to impress!
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![Profile picture of Crimsin]()
hello dearest Daniel thank you graciously have a good day today ❤️
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Wow this is dark and really good. Bravo
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![Profile picture of Crimsin]()
hello beautiful Fia good morning thank you graciously for the love on this ❤️
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![Profile picture of Damian DeadLove]()
Powerfully penned, Brenda. Excellent dark write my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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![Profile picture of Crimsin]()
hello dearest Damian thank you for showing me love on these ❤️
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![Profile picture of Fia Naturie]()
This is a heartfelt tribute to your friends. Lovely
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![Profile picture of Crimsin]()
I was just looking back last night over the years how people influenced me you at Starsrite do as well thank you lovely lady ❤️
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![Profile picture of Damian DeadLove]()
Beautifully penned, Brenda. Excellent tribute my friend, some people come into our lives to change it for the better. At least that’s been my experience. Appreciate you.
Damian
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thank you graciously dearest Damian it was all worth the experience even seeing some fade they find my heart often ❤️
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Ahh, Brenda, I think our days in the Underground molded and changed us all in some fashion. You will always be my leather thigh high stiletto boot stomper. Nobody lays down fire like you. There’s a lot of echoing back to us still, isn’t there from those halls? I found my fierce…in no small part by watching you rock it out so fearlessly. Love you, girl 🧡
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Benjamin Scraps wrote a new post
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Read MoreCroaking sky, her clouded eyesspeak no more my wet rock homethunder-clap for pain & prizepeace within this patient stormfeathered crowning starry shinebrimstone shores our fleshy leakblazing calm through battered timemellowed from her salted peakcrooning zenith siren headsickle moon reaps...
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you’re so dark dearest Benjamin intiguing ❤️
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This poem is heavy. Dark and intriguing. Nice work.
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I imagine a grotto with the rocks are covered in with orange red seaweed. Then again, I see a grunion run when they come out of the sand, and the eyes look almost blue black
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Another great observation, Fia. You’re definitely on point about the water elements. This piece was partially inspired by watching crawdads slip in & out of their dark caves in a mountain stream.
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Powerfully penned, Benjamin. Excellent write my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Beautifully imagined, Fia, an excellent effort!
Deserves a VERY strong title!
ISSUES TO CONSIDER:
1. Unnecessarily Capitalizing every line, which tends to confuse when one complete line, thought, etc; begins or ends, effectively stumbling the flow, attention, and overall magical smoothness of a poem’s captive spell.
2. Poetic voice … how a poe…Read More