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Fia Naturie wrote a new post
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Read MoreHow can I competeShe had trained you for her desiresShe tells you to count before you beginYou take deep breaths, trembling You either fear heror you desire her Lust or disgustRides you hard She tells you she wants you to play something...
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Thank you, Jacob ;))
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![Profile picture of Backdeckbenny (Peter)]()
Fia….I thought it was more about a femdom sorta thing….still good either way.👍
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Haha..well you never know when I could pop a poem like that out. Thank you, Peter;))
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I just can’t imagine any hot blooded music loving fella NOT enjoying this & DEEPLY .. Bravo Mistress F .. Neville 😎👍
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Thank you, Neville.(big smile here);))
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excellent write
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Thank you, twoffthythree ;))
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![Profile picture of Damian DeadLove]()
Beautifully penned, Fia. Music is a seductive lady, excellent write my friend. Appreciate you, cuz.
Damian
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Thank you, Damian;)) Music is exactly that,
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Fia this was smoking. I love piano music and this is one of the most creative poems on seduction of a pianist I have read. I felt the flame of his helplessness because her womanly powers. Sizzling.
John
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Thank you, John;))
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Backdeckbenny (Peter) wrote a new post
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Read MorePoison left her lips "it's you that I detest"His mouth bent towards his chest.He died,Was for the best.
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There is a great pain in words
And there is also joy.A really moving piece.
Regards James
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Emily Dickinson once said “Words have the power to kill, they also have the power to heal.”
And here it is the former that occurs.
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There is nothing quite like the sting of harsh well placed words. We humans can make weapons out of everything. Still, an ugly truth is less harmful than a pretty lie. Excellent write!
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Given the state of the world, there are consequences to actions.
Nice spill.
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Read MoreAI Art Generated by Goldenmyst Where the Sacred Cenote Remembers the Tasteof Forbidden Jicama Under a Borrowed Moon A marital spat erupts between the Mayan creator, Hunab Ku, and the creatrix of humankind because he cheated on her with a...
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I like how you blend Mayan and African in this. The gods would never be as severally punished as a human would. Then she found or they found someone for her. To make her behave. I like it.
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Love your thoughts on my story my friend. Indeed the human woman seems to be the most punished. Very glad you enjoyed how I put African and Mayan cultures together in my story. Yes indeed she was made to behave. Thank you so much for reading my friend.
John
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Deep gratitude. I very much appreciate your reflections on my story. Love your impressions on my story. Really means so much to me. Great thanks.
John
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This is such a truly mesmerizing story. I was captivated from the very first line. You weave a vivid, beautiful tale of myth, transformation, and empowerment.
Tayanna’s journey from mortal victim to spiritually and physically reborn heroine is stunning, and I love the playful ending where she cleverly draws her distracted partner back to their love and intimacy. A brilliant blend of legend, heart, and agency.
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Your words here are true to my story, Romaj. Your review is so excellently written and so perceptive as you followed the story’s threads with amazing insight. I thank you from my heart for your keen understanding of the underlying themes held within my tale. Your comment clearly reflects your in depth reading of this tale and I am truly grateful to you.
John
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This, to me, is a story of trials and the wisdom that is gained from them for Tayanna. It’s also about second chances and forgiveness. The potion itself seems a lock and key. Well done, John.
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Thank you so much Tim. I love your keen observations here. You really have a great mind that sees into the heart of the themes of my stories. I am forever grateful to you for really delving deep into the meaning of my tale. And very grateful for your behind the scenes advice on revisions that made the story so much clearer and better. Most grateful.
John
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Marvelous piece here John. You have the gift of telling a story and keeping us intrigued from start to finish. A story I would love to see converted to film. Bravo!
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Deep gratitude my friend for your reading of my story. Your words on my prose are taken to heart. Much appreciated especially your thoughts on how this could make a good film. Thank you so much.
John
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The want and the holding back are tormenting. Nicely done
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Thank you SeaCat!
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Damian DeadLove wrote a new post
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Read MoreFueled by a consuming rage Pointed at every situation As I fall into the final stage Right before the initiation Locked inside self-torment Wiggling out of the noose Keeping all the spirits dormant Until madness is busting loose Pressure building within me Anger clouding all that I see Face...
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Great!
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Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Adagio. So glad you connected with the write my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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This is really good. Damian <3
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Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Fia. So glad you connected with the write my friend. Appreciate you, cuz.
Damian
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Oh yeah, this one definitely needs a place on the album! I hope it’s coming along well! The halls are a bit echo-ey without you wandering them as often, my friend
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Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Willow. So glad you connected with the write my friend. It’s going, though it took a while to get my “Logic Pro” software. Which allows me to mix better and I can even master my music with it. But, I got a song mapped out structurally, I have lyrics for everything but the bridge. Which I just came up with that bridge tonight. Gotta record vocals, and backing vocals next. Hopefully, I’ll be letting you hear it soon. I miss you too, my friend. You’ve been penning some excellent work my friend. Thanks for your continued support, it means a lot to me. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Powerful work. Superb.
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Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Thomas. So glad you connected with the write my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Great work. I get an image of a man struggling with who to trust.
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Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Nick. So glad you connected with the write my friend. Pretty much. Appreciate you.
Damian
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I get the sense of internal conflict, and the rhythm and urgency make it clear these are lyrics meant to be performed.
The energy builds perfectly toward the chorus: “Face to face with destiny…” I especially like the line “Loyal to the art of betrayal” – it’s a great, concise piece of wordplay.
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Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Roma. So glad you connected with the lyrics my friend. I love that line as well. Appreciate you.
Damian
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More great lyrics, Damian. Very heavy stuff. I hope to hear the music someday.
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Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Tim. So glad you connected with the lyrics my friend. When I get some songs finished, I’ll let you check them out. Appreciate you.
Damian
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A kickin piece my friend. Your a gift to the world with your writing.
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Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Keith. So glad you connected with the lyrics my friend. Thanks for the continued support brother, means a lot to me. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Well poemed my friend .. 😎👍
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Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Neville. So glad you connected with the write my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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My pleasure entirely .. 👍
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I love this piece. You create an excellent and interesting metaphor and you carry it through from beginning to end.
It really works and we feel the relationship between the poem’s subject and the piano.
nicely done, Fia.
j.