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Fia Naturie posted in the group ”BACK TO POETRY BASICS”
Was born with eyes wide open
To be prepared for the truth
Not wanting to offend
What had happened on the roofHolding pasts in a box
We crawl, we stand, then walk
Rusty keys enter locks
Speaking words before caughtStreams of tears without sound
Lover’s end, rings withdrawn
heartbeat forever unbound
Dawn shows you were a p…Read More2 Comments-
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Thank you
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Read MoreMelancholy sits quietly and I with herwith a gentle remider to breathewe watch the cotton candy clouds flow byas we lie watching blue skiesa stark contast to our moodhurt on a colorful dayit seems wrong and out of placethe...
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Beautifully penned, Brenda. Excellent write my friend, really dig this one a lot. Appreciate you.
Damian
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hello dearest Damian good evening thank you graciously I’m happy you liked it ❤️
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Lovely piece Brenda. The words are marvelously woven to create a delicate, fragile piece of poetry. xo
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hi dearest Keith good evening thank you my friend I can be gentle when I want to ❤️
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I wonder if that spider, doing what nature intended, ever said to himself – what a lovely day it is today?
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I don’t know dearest Tim I believe if we listen we can hear nature and the earth talk…it is at all possible…everything has a frequency thank you for your thoughts ❤️
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Such a fine verse. I really needed that. TY & hugs+++
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hello dearest Jim thank you graciously I know my metaphors are funny I’m happy it worked for you ❤️
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Read MoreMirrors mirroring not what mirrors mirror. Drinking this mirage, emulating my form. Echoes of reflecting thoughts exuding an air of sorrow. The presences within the glass, weeps deeply at its glassy heart. A blind man I am, staring into this mirror. Blinded in darkness, yet sighting the pain. These curtained eyes, sightful...
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Thanks. It’s a wonder publishers nor agents are getting back to me to publish my work. Read your piece: Brutal. Very deep and kept me hooked.
Daniel
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Beautiful Daniel. Love the flow and wordplay in this!
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Read MoreThe phantom voices are soundless unsoundness to the normal world. With my own tongue, psychosis cracks this lash, scolding the empty air. Give one hell, give another heaven, but where is my heaven? Fracture this jawbone - this jabbering embarrassment within my vacant face! Raked over hellish coals, blistering with utterances, my mind...
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I feel you dearest Daniel beautiful expression and powerful ❤️
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Okay, Fia 👌 Thanks for your submission and participation. You’ve made a very good start, with the basic format of a Sonnet down pat … 3 Quatrains and a Rhyming Couplet, and your rhyme-scheme is spot-on. In particular, your topic is interesting, with emotion depth, strong metaphorical imagery, and captivating ambiance that sets the mood. With a b…Read More