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Fia Naturie posted in the group ”BACK TO POETRY BASICS”
Okay, I am stuck with this, but I am trying.
Was born with eyes wide open
To be prepared for the truth
No one seemed to care or wanted to offend
What had happened on the roofTime withholds memories in a box
We crawl, then stand, and eventually walk
As a rusty key enters an unforgiving lock
Uttering words before learning to talk6 Comments-
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I am going to. By next week it should be better.
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I hope so … the topic is very interesting, if you can get it into proper Sonnet format. : )
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I’m trying
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For examples, you might read and study some of my posted sonnets, applying what you’ve learned from the lesson to become a bit more familiar with the Sonnet format … you should have it down by next week’s session. It doesn’t have to be perfect, just show a basic understanding we can build on.
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okay
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Read MoreMidsummer season on my wintry lips, these modern symptoms from antiquated sorrows. The sunlight of acceptance, and midnight of isolation. Youthful blushes and the wrinkles of experience, I have the free will to question my fate. This wealth of imagination, and the poverty of my reality. The...
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Your imagination is a beautiful flowering garden, you are a wealthy man, dear Daniel! Your wording is awesome. You are a master in using the stylistic device of contrasts!
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Daniel this is sublime in its dark vision. You have so much to say in your poem here and I for one am really liking what you wrote. Though dark it has a flow that is mesmerizing.
John
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Read MoreThere is a crack in my mind and everything flows into it. My head floods with such intensity, I drown in my own little world. I look through my eyes, nothing is what it seems. Blinded I am from the truth. Lost... oh, so lost! Where...
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Powerful, insightful and honest.
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This just flows and sings the song of darkness in an engaging way. I could feel your words deep in my marrow.
John
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Read MoreI do not know anymore if you are dead or alive. Your moonlit face, no more can I recognize! Your eyes are twin suns arisen, sometimes manic, sometimes depressed. Hibernating beneath your eyelids, over your nightscape a brilliant aurora! As manic as the midnight sun, as depressed as...
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Read MoreLove Sonnet IX Your skin is Earth tone, deep brown, fertile with flowering life and the fragrance of pine and Mahagony-filled mountains. Oak and Sycamore take root in your breasts, as your mouth breathes in summer rain and exhales oceans of whale songs sung in worldwide symphonies that burst with...
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Well I don’t think any woman would know what to say after reading THIS, and it surprises me as I read your poetry how much alike we seem to express poetry, love and nature all together in oneness. This is beyond gorgeous… though it paint such a vivid imagery of flesh, but it goes deeper than this, speaking of a higher love as it flows through everything. Outstanding, magnificent and simply Breathtaking… Nirvana and “come as You are” perfect words for such poem… Thank You!
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AAAWWWW!! And now I am blushing again. Light, what is “gorgeous”, is your comment.
And I must also apologize, I have not read enough of your words to get to know your poetic expressions and beliefs. Something I will correct. My only excuse is that I am new here at SR and just beginning to feel my way around and reading the poetry here. Poor excuse at that.
But I do agree and I am glad you see that we humans are capable of so much more than we are at present. We have the capacity of great love and understanding of everything around us, how we are both individuals and connected at the same time. We are small when compared to the world around us, and yet what and who we are can determine the fate of our existence. I think poetry should communicate this as well as be the center of how we shout against all oppression.
Anyway, a much larger conversation. Thank you so much for your kindness and your comment on this poem, Light
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Hi Mary, you swoon and I blush! er… I mean, can I blame it on those blue lips and eye shadow?? er.. there I go blushing again, what the hell!?? What I mean to say is, Thank you for such kind words and always welcomed visits. Curt, backing out the room before he is bopped upside the head. ;0)
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Fia, you really need to study the lesson more thoroughly for a complete understanding.