A choice has to be made, a step must be taken. Enjoying the series

Powerfully penned, 253. Excellent write my friend. Sounds like falling in quicksand at first, then embracing the fear and just going for it, improvising all the possible outcomes while dodging the bullets wizzing by. Loving this series, all your lines are precise laying out the story and working in unison. Hell Yeah. Appreciate you.

Damian

It feels like there is fear here.bto strike the keys to get the perfect tune.
Like the piano is the task master with no sympathy

Powerfully penned, 253. Excellent write my friend, feels like the muse gets what she needs in the end. I couldn’t pick a verse though, because they’re all fucking tight. Nice work. Appreciate you.

Damian

Nice to see the structured discipline.
Cathartic work.

Now this is what I call perfect poetry

Thank you so much for the compliment. I enjoyed the processes and your guidance.

Goodness-ME, Fia!🍷

I’m amazed at how well you’ve done with your first effort at writing a Sonnet … it just goes to show the wonders waiting to be unlocked and freed under the surface of one’s bountiful potential.

This is no small accomplishment, and one you should be exceedingly proud of, as only a rare few of all poetesses and poets can compose a correct Sonnet. The Sonnet form is known as the Rolls Royce of poetry, and due to its “iambic pentameter” requirement many give-up before ever mastering its beautifully rhythmical unstressedSTRESSED meter.

How exemplary your natural creativity fits so smoothly into the diction and syntax of each line, and how perfectly your lines enjamb and break. Emotion, metaphor, imagery, grammar, spot-on rhymes (except, V2, L3&4, but it’s near-rhyme and can be addressed anytime) … also, your all around theme and ambiance are held faithfully throughout.

Poignantly sad, you convey a tale so many can relate to in so many ways … you’re an amazingly original poetess, Fia, with a broad potential to master the art of poetry few possess.

Thank you for sharing your lovely potic skills, to inspire us all at the “Back to Poetry Basics” group.
You make an olde bard ‘n teacher so proud and ohhhh-sooo very happy! ⁓ Richard🖌

Beautifully penned, Fia. Excellent sonnet my friend, you can do anything you put your mind to cuz. Nicely done. Appreciate you.

Damian

Tremendous work.