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FlatDaddy wrote a new post
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Thank you, Fia. It was a trip performing this, especially at the end. The first time I did it the crowd just sat there, silent. I thought, oh, fuck! I guess I’ll never do this one again. Then someone started to clap, then another, then everyone was applauding — but not very loud. And I understood.But that was a hellofa time, very scary, especially for the people who had been infected. A sure death penalty, very slowly.
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I read this late last night and had to log off before I commented.
This is intense. For as dark as it is it has a lot of intimacy.
Through you the audience got to know her and in turn care about her.
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Thank you. I do appreciate the comment. I was in the middle of writing a message to you about “Pretty Eyes” when I got your notification.
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A bit macabre, here. Quite appropriate for this time of year. Poe might be jealous. Very good writing, I’d say.
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This poem beautifully channels Neruda’s sensual spirit. The union of passion, earth, and language. The imagery feels both intimate and elemental, echoing the way Neruda made love and nature inseparable.
It’s a stirring tribute that captures his essence…beautifully penned.
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You turned the poem into something else with this, “and all the common words of my peasant’s pen.” Following the next verse, IF you didn’t brilliantly did this, it would have been just a strong sensual poem, but with how amazingly You brought a higher level with the last two line of verse one, then the gorgeous verse two, is what makes the poem very special to me, exploring and expressing a deeper connection. I believe Pablo would admire this🤍
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One of the things I love about Neruda’s poetry is his use of everyday words. With them, he word paints images, metaphors and a feeling of LIFE that exists and surrounds us with HOPE.
Light, thank you so much for your insight and understanding of what I wanted (no, needed) to express. If Neruda were still alive, I think I would be tempted to send this poem to him.
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Passionately penned, Neville. Amazing imagery and dig your wordplay my friend. Appreciate you.
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Sometimes brevity is just as strong, like a passing kiss. Your short poem here is very strong in its imagery and how it effects the reader.
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Lust at its Best! a very alluring and strongly passionate picture you’ve worded here. You know how to write in few yet powetful lines, the last two lines brought the unquenched desire, the helplessness, the sigh that comes with the complete surrender… Love this❤️
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I can see why there is silence and then applause. It is poetic the way she decided to leave this earth the moment she arrived, but still, that is something. I like sending it to the senator, showing what happens to people with budget cuts to needed medications and research for a cure.