Lock out of love and the softest thing is the pillow as bars.

Your reply is better than the poem. THank you, Fia.
j.

Fabulous been there done that
Loved it I can relate

Lots of truth in this, j. Great metaphor.

Not exactly the plan: a double bed, the making and filling of it should be, can be, a nest made by two for two, a love-in forever. Fine writing, fine metaphor as ever, sir jacob.

A less than warm bed room scene, just missing the Keep Out sign. Relatable to many dear J. The blues indeed. Great metaphors as usual.

Chris

Cleverly penned, Jacob. Amazing write my friend. Appreciate you.

Damian

It kinda read like getting stuck in a spiderweb. Amazing write!

I read this and imagined Bruce Hornsby banging on his keys as he belts out “That’s the way it is”—
and those people “Standin’ in line, marking time, waiting for the welfare dime, cause they can’t buy a job”—
The piano is an inanimate object that the speaker in this poem brings to life…
the poem has life.
Good write.
j.

Powerfully penned, twofiftythree. Love the raw vibe of this one my friend. Appreciate you.

Damian