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twofiftythree posted in the group ”BACK TO POETRY BASICS”
for sake of the lesson I added punctuation…don’t get attached.
gravity slip
I stumble thru a world
that’s bent slightly outa focus
as if it were half dream,
half burn.
heat risin off my skin in waves
like quiet embers tryin
to decide if I’m worth ignitin.every breath feels wrong,
every step lands heavy,
gravity clawin up my s…Read More![Profile Photo]()
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Read Moremorose feelings entertainmy sexuality tied to darknessstunningly beautiful, captivating my soulseducing my flesh, lust flashes and I cavea seduction of spiritquietly amusing me, while my thoughts are abusedin the thick of things I moantasting the aether and the need...
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Wonderfully worshipable
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hello dearest Jim good evening thank you for the love on this ❤️
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Very haunting and pure shaking.
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hello dearest Adagio good morning thank you graciously ❤️
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![Profile picture of Damian DeadLove]()
Passionately penned, Brenda. Excellent write with dark undercurrents my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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hello dearest Damian thank you graciously ❤️
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Beautifully penned, Kelly. Excellent write my friend, loved the depth of this one. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Thank you, Damian. How wonderful to find you here, leaving me with a smile!
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More. Post more.
Even the light from a burning match is epic within pitch black. This is what this write of yours is.
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I will do my best not to disappoint. Till next time…thank you, Mark!
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Okay, this is one of those writes that makes you sit and just let it seep in. This is so good.
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I am so thrilled you enjoyed this one, Fia. It has long been one of my favorites. A poem that perhaps, you can get lost in.
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Fantastic.
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Good to see you again, Adagio. Thank you for the vote of confidence!
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Fia Naturie posted in the group ”BACK TO POETRY BASICS”
This is my Free verse
Do you hear the sun?
As the rays beat down on the ground,
It is subtle but poignant
It’s purpose is to burn.
The exquisite heat,
does not match the coolness in your eyesDo you smell the wind?
Multicolored in its complexity
Surrounds you,
Invades your very core.
It gives you life.
Then withdraws to take your b…Read More![Profile Photo]()
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Beautifully imagined, Fia, an excellent effort!
Deserves a VERY strong title!ISSUES TO CONSIDER:
1. Unnecessarily Capitalizing every line, which tends to confuse when one complete line, thought, etc; begins or ends, effectively stumbling the flow, attention, and overall magical smoothness of a poem’s captive spell.
2. Poetic voice … how a poe…Read More-
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I’ll work on it. Thanks for the guidance
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You make sharing a distinct pleasure. 🙏
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![Profile picture of Damian DeadLove]()
Powerfully penned, Brenda. Excellent write my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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good evening dearest Damian thank you graciously I appreciate you very much ❤️
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All-out effort as always! Never cease to impress!
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hello dearest Daniel thank you graciously have a good day today ❤️
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Sheer brilliance, Syr 253
You’ve mastered the heatbeat techniques of Free Verse poetry: Imagery, deeply gripping emotion, metaphor, spot-on line-breaks, seamless enjambment, syntax; and, except for the distraction of missing “g’s”, your diction and spellbinding flow would be irresistibly captivating to the senses.
Also, your well-placed…Read More