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      Last Rights

      The action takes place in a bathroom. The actor, an average looking man or woman wearing casual contemporary clothing, will be addressed from this point as ACTOR. Dependent upon the size of the stage and the budget, another room...

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      • I can see why there is silence and then applause. It is poetic the way she decided to leave this earth the moment she arrived, but still, that is something. I like sending it to the senator, showing what happens to people with budget cuts to needed medications and research for a cure.

        • Thank you, Fia. It was a trip performing this, especially at the end. The first time I did it the crowd just sat there, silent. I thought, oh, fuck! I guess I’ll never do this one again. Then someone started to clap, then another, then everyone was applauding — but not very loud. And I understood.But that was a hellofa time, very scary, especially for the people who had been infected. A sure death penalty, very slowly.

      • I read this late last night and had to log off before I commented.
        This is intense. For as dark as it is it has a lot of intimacy.
        Through you the audience got to know her and in turn care about her.
        Bravo!👏

      • A bit macabre, here. Quite appropriate for this time of year. Poe might be jealous. Very good writing, I’d say.

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      BLUE BIRD

      BLUE BIRD Everyone stared at the prettybright blue bird on the power line.Pedestrians pointed and cars stopped.You could hear it's cheerful melody. It raised it's wings and walkedthree feet of the wire prepping fortakeoff. Suddenly, it burst into flames and hit...

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      Sucker Punched

      the world has pausedsilence hammers at the sensesheart still beating...barely...does it even matter...it flutters unheard the universe is screamingbanshee howl of despairsucking life from hopea wildly spinning black holedevouring beauty in its path I am collateral damageinsignificant to the true lossa...

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      • Poetic oxygen is hanging by a fingernail in our world. But! There is hope. Well done, Willow.

      • Thought on this one Lady, maybe to much. We think it would had hit even harder if posted closer to Halloween

        • To be honest, I hadn’t even thought of Halloween. 😂 Just nursing a bit of pain. I actually didn’t think on it much at all. This was a write and drop piece. I tend to do that when emotion is high. Thank you for your thoughts, ME

      • Extraordinarily compelling ink ma’am .. I was hooked from the off and enjoyed the ride write to the very opposite end and no kidding .. Write on my fine literary friend .. Neville

        • I’m not entirely convinced my muse will give me much time off. If you saw my unposted drafts…egads. Thank you for the support on this one

      • Powerfully penned, Willow. Excellent write my friend with precise imagery and wordplay. Felt this one! Appreciate you.

        Damian

        • I felt it too…like a baseball bat to the crotch. There were layers in this one. World and…life, if you get my drift. Thank you, my friend. Your continued support means a lot

      • The way you combined nature and human in this piece is breathtaking. We should not be used as collateral damage for the error of polluting the air. That is one way I took this piece.
        Then the ones that are cast aside unnoticed.. That is sad, but I believe that there is someone noticing them. They may not know what to do to bring more light in their black hole.
        Just thoughts I got from your piece.

        • You’re not far off the mark on this one. As I said to Damian,👆 there are layers to it. Where it takes the reader is between them and their imagination. Thank you for your thoughts, Fia. Much appreciated

      • the same as for all of us – some care
        thank you Willow

      • Wow. This is a cigarette and a shot write. It is almost bitter, almost defeatist. Yet it also feels like you’re scoffing at the processes too. You need a seashell necklace while writing like this. Reminding you of what’s salty out there.

        • Well, I don’t smoke and I’m a tragic lightweight drinker. Just a full blood hippy who lives by the Moon. Still, I get your drift. I guess when I was writing this, I was reminding myself that my little whimpers are fairly insignificant in the grand scheme of things. Thank you for your thoughts, Styxian

      • Willow…you had me from the first line and held me there until the last.
        Message delivered and your mission accomplished.
        The universe never pauses.Everything rises and ceases,nothing permanent….thank God.Imagine a permanent Trump.

        • A permanent Trump sounds like eternal hell. It’s bad enough dealing with it now. And we still have years ahead. I don’t even like the contemplate what will happen next. It’s like living in a minefield. Thank you for your thoughts, Peter

      • This is dark with a lot of reality in it too. You nailed it with your silent hammers.
        What ever the subject matter your writing is it’s articulate and thought provoking.

        • We can’t always hear the blow coming. We just find ourselves flat on our back in agony. Such is our world at present. Thank you for your thoughts, Adelphina

      • Brilliant use of languge and great imagery.

      • damn…incredible write.

      • The world is all too willing to leave the hurt ones behind. Great ink friend.

        • Truth and facts right there. We gotta pick each other up. Thank you, my friend

      • We see each other. We hear each other. We fall together. We rise together. Thank you for seeing, Volupta

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