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      Truths

        At first, it hurt Unexpected Confusion To many why’s   Mind could not wrap around This reality The circumstances   Then it happened again Rage Untamed anger filled my veins Went from why’s To fuck off   Mind did not want to dissect The incident The moment it turned   Quiet ensued Calm returned Different reality New resolve   Once more it happened Done...

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    • Color Coded Tears

      They say tears are color coded.When it's on,the room flooded.What does each color mean? Are tears always loud or seen?Green tears are a nature's child.They come out when lives are in danger,animals wild. Yellow tears are happy tears.Ones that hide all...

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      Poisonous Lullabies

      I only know of lullabiesaddressed to my soul, drip beautifully downfrom your perfect lips, washing away my fears. If you only knew all thethings you said to mewere poisoning my mind. Sure not of the truth anymore,too many feelings colliding,swirling around my head. I...

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      Terpsickore: An Experiment in Rhyme

      Terpsickore:An Experiment in RhymeBy FlatDaddyShe’s not the girl he wanted,    she who haunted him and stalked    him and talked him into dance.Their romance, sparked by music,    He, too sick to see danger.    This dark stranger...

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      • An excellently rendered work, Syr! 🎖️

        Well struck in grammar, vivid imagery and emotional timbre, metaphoric fancies, and all around palpable appeal … left me with an eerie sensation, which I suspect, is part of your intent.
        The rhyme scheme is both entertaining, original, and would be creatively challenging to the average poet, I think. The seven-count lines in Quadra-Verse are also quite unique, as it’s rare (if ever) I’ve read this exact format.
        The endline/three-syllables-in rhyme scheme flows nicely, too … I like it very much and may give it a go!
        NitPick: Check the four syllables in on V6-L, the only rhyme that tripped me.

        Thank you, Syr Poet, most humbly and gratefully for the gracious invite! ⁓ Richard🖌

      • Well, that’s a damned nice deconstructive review, Richard, but I confess I’m at a loss as to your V6-L problem; I fail to see it. As I said earlier, I have absolutely no formal training. Never took a class in poetry; highschool English Lit was the closest I got to that. Everything else is self taught. I didn’t start writing til I was in my twenties, and that was all performance work, more geared to my dramatic training. I never thought about writing poetry on a serious level until about 2o years ago; took a 20 year hiatus from life in general when I was injured. Didn’t write so much as a dirty limerick during that time, and finally wanted to see what I could do on a serious level about ten years ago, and even then my concentration was on entertainment. Stuff like, Omniumgatherum, to stretch my head and entertain. So, can you explain in more non-technical terms? I would appreciate it greatly.

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      walk with me

      depression reigns and I cannot alterin the end love betrays us allwhether it be a slow slipping away of passionor a heart that can't let go...hurtingdying in the moment as feelings buildeuphoria when you utter you love medeep sadness...

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