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PAR (Paulo Acácio Ramos) posted in the group National Poetry Month
The Louvre, the Funhouse, the Disco
April 24th arrives
already half‑forgotten,
like a dream you try to hold
but it keeps slipping
through the fingers of your mind.It brings with it
a fading memory
of the main room
of the Louvre…
not the paintings,
not the tourists,
not the velvet ropes,
but the room itself:
its b…Read More![Profile Photo]()
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Read MoreReflection Across the scuffed wood of this quiet booth,I slide a steaming mug toward your hands.You look so small, swallowed by that coat,Your eyes a restless map of practiced fear.I watch you stir the sugar, dark and deep,As steam...
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Thank you, Flatdaddy. I wholeheartedly agree with you. and I am speaking to myself (older me to younger me(
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Curly Grace posted in the group National Poetry Month
Nativity of Loss
(I will always love you, my heart.)I read a poem that evoked a tear
a single, trembling drop
that spun me backward,
into shadows of what was
and the ever-present numbness
of could-have-beens.25 days to go…
The air tastes different now,
heavier with memory,
as the earth tilts toward the same cold light
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A single trembling drop. that imagery is felt
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Thank you…this really was a pouring out… a hard write for me.
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Actually, two came out that day. and lots of tears… but something I needed to write. It’s been years, but some Christmases I’m a bit indifferent/melancholy… I will post the other as well.
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Fia Naturie posted in the group National Poetry Month
Hello Me
It has been a while
You reached a plateau
traveling many milesWhat you failed to do
Is see what is occurring around youOr you’re choosing not
Not to see
Not to hear
Not to “oh my” share??Me this can not be
Your voice and thoughts need..need..To be set free
Free from the confines
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Hello you, it’s just me. ;0) pretty cool poem Fia.
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Thank you so much;))
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I feel you on this lovely Fia I used to clam up like that when my kooky thoughts would come but I can’t hold them anymore…be yourself lady we will love you ❤️
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Thank you Crimsin. I will keep being me;))
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Powerfully penned, Fia. Excellent write my friend. It feels like inner dialogue to me, you and your subconscious kinda vibe. Nicely done as always. I can relate.. Appreciate you, Cuz.
Damian
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Thank you Damian, Yeah, it is inner dialogue. Sometimes I need to set myself straight. lol
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These conversations with self are some of the best. I enjoyed the way this one wove the reader into it
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Thank you willow. Yeah, sometimes sitting and just think things through of what happened or what should happen. Helps.
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This is excellent. It had some rhyme and rhythm.
Nothing felt forced at all.
Great stream of consciousness amiga:)-
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Thank you, I just let whatever I was thinking come out. thank you;))
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Sometimes its necessary to pause, reflect and take inventory. I like the honesty because we do tend to lose sight for a while until we become more aware of ourselves.
Nicely done.
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This is a very powerful piece, Kay, but I would ask you not to use capital letters at the start of a line that is a continuation of the preceding line; it makes the reader stop unsure if this is part of the line above or a new thought. And use punctuation wisely, as a tool to guide the reader when needed. The better the flow, the more enjoyable is the read. This piece is very good as it is, and you need not change a thing; but try my suggestions and see how it feels.
I wonder: are you actually addressing another person — or yourself? It seems to me you are bucking up your own courage, but I could be wrong. It works either way. Nice work, my friend.
FD