willow… wow… when I heard this its as if I was sitting on that porch listening to the the story… amazing

Beautiful. I love this. Powerful. Vivid and sharp.

First off, the rhyme scheme is on point. I can tell you really had to pull some crafty words to make the rhyme and tempo stay true. You succeeded. The story within is great, it follows through well and ends with a great mood.
Awesome Willow.

I just listened to the recording! The music matched the tone of your write perfectly.
Even the voice! I’m all for letting go of dead weight in any write. Nicely done:)

Powerfully penned, Willow. Another excellent write that exercises demons while telling this tale of survival my friend. The music sets the mood as the voice delivers the truth while speaking your words with precision. Goosebumps on this one. Amazing read/listen as always. Appreciate you, Sis.

Damian

Hi Peter

How are you?
You expressed so much in few lines.

Jessy Jacob

It’s the ones who insist they’re fine when clearly they’re not that scare me. We humas are very fragile indeed

Well you’re right! And sometimes we think we know them, until we realize that we don’t. The mind is each of our own little universe, it’s so vast. Some people get off track along the way.

Powerfully penned, Peter. Another excellent write with lots of layers my friend. No one is immune to time and the effects it has on the mind. Thanks for sharing. Amazing read as always. Appreciate you.

Damian

Willow…the words od not come to me and I am a chatter box. Amazing spill of emotions.

Powerfully penned, Willow. Another excellent write with deep layers of emotion and honest storytelling my friend. This one hits harder than a freight train. I concur with everyone above. You took this one to another level. Outstanding read as always. Appreciate you, Sis.

Damian

You can feel desperation and perseverance in every line. Simply stunning.

Thank you, Peter

Thank you, Light 💕

Excellent. Obviously I enjoy story poems the most. It’s in the way it brings the real world into something we all can sense too.
Life is like that, and so writing can be a journal of experience too. This write fills that niche really well.
You are hitting them out of the park a bunch!

This flows like a cascading waterfall.
So much power in each line that it pushes into the next.
Just wow.