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RICHARD "Rascal" JENKINS posted in the group ”BACK TO POETRY BASICS”
Submittted by: Twofiftythree
SENT 23 HOURS, 20 MINUTES AGO
think I got it with this one…the world goes quiet when I think of you
as if the noise remembers to be kind
the pulse slows down the edges soften too
and somethin steadier begins to bindI’ve spent my life in motion hard and fast
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Fia Naturie posted in the group ”BACK TO POETRY BASICS”
Was born with eyes wide open
To be prepared for the truth
Not wanting to offend
What had happened on the roofHolding pasts in a box
We crawl, we stand, then walk
Rusty keys enter locks
Speaking words before caughtStreams of tears without sound
Lover’s end, rings withdrawn
heartbeat forever unbound
Dawn shows you were a p…Read More2 Comments-
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Thank you
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RICHARD "Rascal" JENKINS posted in the group ”BACK TO POETRY BASICS”
GOODNESS, TFT!
Now, THAT is a proper Sonnet … it’s obvious you’ve done your homework.
Your creativity sparks, emotion sings, and diction dances. And, I like your use of elision. Could use a bit’a punctuation.
See critique and edits below:I said I don’t do THIS. POems that behave (STRESS-STRESS / a count long)
that count their beats and…Read More![Profile Photo]()
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V3L4 should be: What’s next, a ballad? Maybe, one or two.
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much appreciated. good luck convincin me to use punctuation 😉
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Now, Syr Bard
Post it so everyone can enjoy your amazing flexibility and creativity with a poet’s pen.
I’ll be first in line to review it for you! ⁓ Richard
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twofiftythree posted in the group ”BACK TO POETRY BASICS”
I said I don’t do this. poems that behave
that count their beats and beg to sound profound
but here I am the fool you couldn’t save
all rhyme and reason. love still hangin roundI hate this form. it’s polished. cold. confined
like scrubbin blood just so it stains again
I tell myself to leave your heart behind
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Hi, Redzone! I welcome you to “BACK TO POETRY BASICS” and would like to invite you to join-in on our Sonnet lesson (below). It’s easy: just read and follow along. I look forward to sharing with you. ⁓ Richard🖌
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Hi Richard,
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oops didn’t mean to send that too short of a reply. I read your paper? instructions about the nature of and what constitutes a formally written English Sonnet. I am afraid I have only ever attempted one. If I can find it I will post in the “Back To Poetry Basics” group. This group was mented to me by Valuptas Whispers Unholy. and then I saw Fia’s…Read More
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C’mon, Curt, join-in. There’s nothing like taking advantage of an opportunity when it present itself, and it’s FREE! With your creative talents, it would be most thrilling to read your version of a proper Sonnet, and then you’ll know how from then on. : )
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Okay, Fia 👌 Thanks for your submission and participation. You’ve made a very good start, with the basic format of a Sonnet down pat … 3 Quatrains and a Rhyming Couplet, and your rhyme-scheme is spot-on. In particular, your topic is interesting, with emotion depth, strong metaphorical imagery, and captivating ambiance that sets the mood. With a b…Read More