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    I Promise

    Everyone wants the sweet and delicate Until the door is lockedThen what is wanted and desired Are nails across heated skinWhispers and dark promisesI promise not to say a word.I promise to release youfrom your everyday routineI promise to...

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    Welcome to another edition of Stars Rite News and Updates!

    As we ease into the summer months, I’d be remiss if I didn’t remind you to carry the essentials every poet and writer needs. If you’re old-school like some of us, don’t forget your trusty pen, a small notepad, and...

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    Welcome to another edition of Stars Rite News and Updates!

    As we ease into the summer months, I’d be remiss if I didn’t remind you to carry the essentials every poet and writer needs.
    If you’re old-school like some of us, don’t forget your trusty pen, a small notepad, and maybe even a pair of sunglasses if you’re trying to stay incogni…Read More

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    In Search of Fantasia pt 2

    Several weeks at sea and no flower as yet. The crew was still in high spirits due to the captain’s demeanor Vivian suspects. She has been watching him since the day they set sail. The way he treats his crew...

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    • Brilliantly penned, Fia. Love this story my friend, the dialogue definitely gives it a 40’s vibe. Fantastic write. Appreciate you.

      Damian

    • Thank you and I appreciate your comments.

    • Love what you’re doing, girl. Honestly, this feels much older than the 40’s to me. Darrius feels somehow like a pirate, and Vivian his captive. Of course, she isn’t a prisoner. Or is she? This is intentional.

      And Darrius is such an egotistical SOB. What guy tells a woman that everyone on board can see her intentions? That’s a guy who is overly confident, a guy who wants to make things more difficult for himself, who creates a challenge from a gift.,

      Love the dialogue. There’s limited description and imagery here, which is actually where you might more specifically date the scene as if that really mattered. My one suggestion would be backing off spoon feeding your reader about the thoughts and feelings of your characters. Let them act it out, and we can all come to our own conclusions.

      You’ve got a lot to cover in two more chapters. The centerpiece of this mysterious journey has yet to be exposed. What would be the purpose of searching out a flower under the urgent circumstance of war?

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    shaken

    tranquility in stonedon't make we weep anymoresadness in sorrow for the morrowthe dark in me quiverstrembling with losssacred understanding I am alteredwithin the bleak witheredmy lightshine shrinks in the shadowsthen evolves becoming britghtermy soul loves whollyso it is no...

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