Okay, that is gut-wrenching. To lay there and live a slow death that you did not sign up for. Not right at all.
This is executed well

Thanks for the thoughtful comment Fia.

It’s not right and it’s not wrong , it’s just the way it is.Like everything in life,even suffering is impermanent.

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Quite moving..thank you for sharing

I’ve often felt that pain is preferable to apathy. That quiet passing out of space. This haunts & hurts. So often the case, & always hard

First the Technical: Excellent consistency with meter, beautifully executed rhyme.
Composition: Incredible depth. As Willow noted, the piece reflects a falling away, a loss of touch and intimacy with no explanation. It’s a death of sorts, and you’ve painted it perfectly. Really well done.

Great write Fia.

I think we’d agree we aren’t our bodies.
Somewhere in the spaces between our cells , our atoms, is our consciousness…but that’s not us either.
We cling to our notion of self but really are non self.Nothing.

Phenomenally penned, Fia. This was a powerful write my friend, I think our soul is our mind. It makes sense to me anyways. Appreciate you.

Damian

The Heart & Soul is everything to a person’s existence. The brain is just there to put it into words. Great piece Fia. xo

Powerfully penned, Drieks. Into the book it belongs! Love the wordplay and phrasing my friend. Nice flow as well. Appreciate you.

Damian

Awesome poem. The words and rhymes are acidic!

Thank you Mary!
And you inspire me to keep writing with compliments like that!

Damn, Fia. This write burns hotter than a thousand suns my friend. I’d need to build an Igloo just to cool down after reading this one. Appreciate you.

Damian

Mmmm!!!! Yes Fia, I do enjoy a nice toy 😉 this was spicy and positively delicious. Keep em cummin!!
xx
~P.G💋

Sizzling hot!!!!!!!!!! XXXXXXXXXXXXXXO

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