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Read MoreYour inconsistencies are consistentHappy yet state your sadAngry but seem to be gladRelaxed but wound tightWant to be gentle yet you biteNo one understandsNo one took the timeNo one gave a shitAlways left behindWeeping from rageSpilling into the calm...
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Thank you, willow
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I like the contrast you used in some verses. Dark thoughts indeed. Well done, Fia!
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Thank you, M.E appreciate that
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Powerfully penned, Fia. Into the book it belongs! Amazing write my friend, with dark vibes very present. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Thank you, Damian. was in the zone.
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Thank you, Adira;))
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Fantatic!
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Thank you, Adagio
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G’Mornin’, Fia 🌤️
Good title, and what a great lead-in with V1’s frustrating contradictions setting the mood for what’s to come (L2, make it “you’re” sad).
Boy howdy! You sure know how to express the angst so many of us have had to endure and overcome; yet, it seems some never do … sadly so.You’re such a creative writer, Ria: I admire your keen ability to weave vivid imagery and emotion throughout every verse and in the use of spot-on rhymes, timely line-breaks, and smooth flow.
Excellent wrap-up verse, too. For rhyme’s sake with “despair,” consider using “there” rather than “here” (just a thought).“Wake, wake from this despair! (great poe-esque touch)
It is me you’re talking to …
no one else is there.”Fia, you’re such a joy to read and share with. 🌈
Thank you ever-so warmly! ⁓ Richard🖌-
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Thank you so much for the compliment and comment. Richard I appreciate it
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Oh, sure thing, Fia!
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Yes, it has been changed. Ty ;))
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You misunderstood, Fia … I meant to change L4 to “there”. Not L2, which was fine as “despair”.
So “despair” and “there” rhyme.
(like this)
Still, you find me in your dreams
Wake, wake from this despair
It is me you’re talking to
No one else is there.
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Very captivating.
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Thank you, CasketSharpe;))
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Thank you, Steven;))
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Read MoreWhen heat rises off your body and it's not from Passion When you struggle to find the words any words because you lost your voice When tiny beads of sweat escape not from pores, indicating it's time The Great Wall of Fia...
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hello beautiful Fia I’m sorry you’re feeling icky I hope yu feel better soon drink some green tea with a little tumeric it should help 💕great write
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Thank you, crimsin. add the turmeric to the tea?
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make it like an english tea a little creamer, green tea, a half teaspoon of turmeric in the hot tea you will feel better the tumeric helps with body aches and you don’t tasted it in the tea…I know it sounds weird but it’s good…
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Thank you, Ravens:)
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Get well…..words need to be written.
😷
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Thank you, Peter. Appreciate that
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Get well, Fia. Even when you’re sick, you write incredibly. Get so me rest my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Thank you, Damian
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Fia very sorry for your ailment. But you sure wrote a fantastic poem about it. Digs deep and you really made it an engaging read. Hope this comment finds you feeling better.
John
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Thank you, goldenmist
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Sickness is sometimes like love. You don’t know if your coming or going.
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Thank you, Casket. I sure did not know what was going on.
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Benjamin Scraps replied to the topic DUP farewell playlist in the forum Underground Caverns
We’re in the thick of Summer time, baby. Have drink and a drive and go see what you can find! DON’T do that, actually!! I’m just getting into the spirit of things. Still, enjoy your summer. It won’t last long. How many you got left?
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Read MoreEarly spark & saunterthe morning stalksa warmed-up,chilled-outflowering, first...this heat(more like a buzz)all through the night:a zephyr-frozenspear of lightspits the stoneon a space ofwavering daysstabbing westwardgrowls for hopethrough a howling gustwhere the darkness stretchesthought & prayersfor old friendsI should've had...
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Powerfully penned, Ben. Incredible write my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Still enjoy reading your idiosyncratic word play. You’ve a talent 👍
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