A Story….. Once
“Once upon a time”:…
or so the stories go;
hell, even the Raven’s Poe
used these words:
“once upon a midnight dreary.”
But who is this
knocking at my door?
She was the
once
in my life
and I welcomed her in
once upon a time.
~~~
Upon a time
once
this time curved around her face
touching sweet dimples,
lips upon my fingertips
and felt time
fold in upon itself
endlessly
once.
~~~
Time
Upon a once
raging fire
knocking at my door
promising more….
Now
time upon a once
nevermore.
redzone 10.15.16
This was beautiful and sad in what I’m now dubbing as classic Redzone.
We played this game in messages to each other very recently, did we not? Oh, on a much smaller scale, of course, and with much less beautiful words than those you have used here, my friend. i.e., “Ah, the sweet smell of success! Or is it the success of sweet smells? etc.” Yes? I like this version much better. You added beauty to it, and made it much more intimate and meaningful. What we did before was meaningless fluff, now a silk purse from a poet’s ear.
I am a fan of Poe’s I like how you changed each stanza around like that;))