This is so dark and haunting. fav line is “Their shrill shadowed the echo through these hollow halls,
“The dark-suited burial conveyance led amiss of a poet’s demise.”

Passionately penned, Betty. Excellent write my friend. Appreciate you.

Damian

Oh-Wow! I absolutely loved this, Betty. Best wishes, Harriet-Jacqui Furl, published erotica author

Betty love your writes. Wooo

Your pieces are always so stimulating Lady, to tight

What! Betty graces us with some creative writing here! Or, also known as Lillith has entered Eden! What!

“forearm against your pelvis” = Details are everything, and this is exquisitely precise to make it a real moment. That bit of control is boss!
Well you had mentioned that you were going to concentrate on erotica. So that explains this humdinger of a write!
The way you make it so realistic, without any overly porn promotion, shows your skill, ahem, at creative writing.
Good to see you donating to the site. It’s about time!

Icon? Don’t be calling me no foreign little car made by Hundai !! I’m tall dammit!
Okay okay.
You are a premium writer, Betty. Any site goes up in value with you posting in it. It isn’t always about the subject matter. It’s the technique and ability of the writer that carries the weight. You are gold.

Gotta love the raw honesty spilling onto the page without restraint. “Are those your toes curling in the sheets?” it’s that damn good.
Nice work Betty.

LOL, thanks Wally. I appreciate you!

Wolves are back! Big bad and naughty wolves. The Wolves you are writing about seem to be more seductive and haunting than threatening.
I’m curious to read your take on this topic.

I am slogging at the library right now reading through the first draft making revisions. About to transcribe it from my notebook to the computer so I can send it to you finally. Ughhhhhh writing is such a process, Elke! Haha 😂