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Read MoreIWhy share a bed,if not to meltlike sugar in warm teatwo bodies sweetening the same silence?IIDoes the moon riseonly to watch the earth sleep.No! It comes to touch,to stir tides in the dark.IIILet us not be strangerswearing the same...
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Read MoreShould I pinch my now small flame and die? Is death really the only way? Should I extinguish what I have left? Why do memories flow from my flame and dry to a still, only to linger on? Is my flame being blown out by...
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Read MoreI watched another sun come upAnd another sun has setAs shadows lengthen into the nightBut nights no darker than the dayAnd my lifeBoth good and badLies wasted in the stainThe feeling of lostWhich cradles me now in emptinessAnd for...
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Joe, that is just breathtaking. What an incredible catharsis. I’ve read many things about the disintegration of love, the falling away – but never anything so utterly raw and weeping as this. Such detail and emotion. The final freedom you describe is so anticlimactic, so real in its hollowness. The wound is so visible, the pain so palpable.
Second person narrative is hugely effective here. It magnifies the emotion of your piece considerably.
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The beauty of love is all that we imagine. The death of love is never what we thought.
Thank you for reading (my writes often ramble), and sharing your thoughts and compliments with me.Here’s to the sweetness of the dream. 🍻 Cheers!
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Glad to share my summer and my Joe speak with you. Its funny that one day pain doesn’t hurt anymore, except sometimes. But if it didn’t hurt, was love really real?
To summer! 🍻 cheers!
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Powerfully penned, Daniel. An incredible write my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian