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Fia Naturie wrote a new post
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I see it as a discovering of the truth about someone close.
It’s a great write however I interpret it.🙏 -
Beautifully penned, Fia. Excellent write my friend, I love your musings. Appreciate you, cuz.
Damian
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good morning lovely Fia this went from beautiful to dark carried out by the frothing sea so poignant ❤️
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Chère F.,
Pollution in its mildest form.
An environmental poem in disguise.
See? That’s the fun of it. To write something small and everyone had his/her own ideas about it.
Pure genius, no matter how you look at it.Keep ‘em coming please…..
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Very mysterious and philosophical.
Regards JamesI love the way glass goes from sharp and dangerous to soft and smooth with the passing tides
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twofiftythree posted in the group ”BACK TO POETRY BASICS”
for sake of the lesson I added punctuation…don’t get attached.
gravity slip
I stumble thru a world
that’s bent slightly outa focus
as if it were half dream,
half burn.
heat risin off my skin in waves
like quiet embers tryin
to decide if I’m worth ignitin.every breath feels wrong,
every step lands heavy,
gravity clawin up my s…Read More-
Sheer brilliance, Syr 253

You’ve mastered the heatbeat techniques of Free Verse poetry: Imagery, deeply gripping emotion, metaphor, spot-on line-breaks, seamless enjambment, syntax; and, except for the distraction of missing “g’s”, your diction and spellbinding flow would be irresistibly captivating to the senses.
Also, your well-placed…Read More
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Crimsin wrote a new post
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Passionately penned, Brenda. Excellent write with dark undercurrents my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Fia Naturie posted in the group ”BACK TO POETRY BASICS”
This is my Free verse
Do you hear the sun?
As the rays beat down on the ground,
It is subtle but poignant
It’s purpose is to burn.
The exquisite heat,
does not match the coolness in your eyesDo you smell the wind?
Multicolored in its complexity
Surrounds you,
Invades your very core.
It gives you life.
Then withdraws to take your b…Read More-
Beautifully imagined, Fia, an excellent effort!
Deserves a VERY strong title!ISSUES TO CONSIDER:
1. Unnecessarily Capitalizing every line, which tends to confuse when one complete line, thought, etc; begins or ends, effectively stumbling the flow, attention, and overall magical smoothness of a poem’s captive spell.
2. Poetic voice … how a poe…Read More -
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I see this as someone discovering the blue green glass for the first time. Interesting poem, Fia.