You had a full poem and you broke it up to have omitted pieces. Interesting concept

An ocean that no one would dare to sail. An ocean of my own tears. Well that is something. I like this;))

What a beautiful concept. It’s funny how often we sink under the weight of our pain. To think of tears as an ocean of our own making and subject to our own belief is beautiful

Beautifully penned, Brandon. I concur with Fia and Willow. Another excellent write my friend. Appreciate you.

Damian

The last line lands in a way that makes you want to reread this again, and let it linger. This caught my breath.

This reads almost like an invocation, a chant of summoning. Much enjoyed this. As Brandon said, it invites rereading 🧡

Powerfully penned, Brenda. Excellent write with dark undertones my friend. I concur with Willow and Brandon. Amazing read. Appreciate you.

Damian

The goal changed and turned into something more quieter. Nice;)

I get this. Jumping alone leaves the mind just as isolated as being alone. If nobody sees, are you real? Do you matter? I so get this. That ending is softly powerful

Powerfully penned, 253. Another excellent write with many layers my friend. I can relate.. Appreciate you.

Damian

This is deep, and it quietly resonates. Great piece 253.