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Read MoreIt had been months since they witnessed the beauty of the stars twinkling in the sky. The moon itself was already a glow before the war, and now it is lost behind the constant overcast, which lingers....
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Meg, thank you as always. Good thing it is only a freewrite and I’ll be putting it together as a more tuned first draft. I see this turning into a novella.
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The artistry in this is exquisite. It almost has the feel of a dance floor with lights swirling over a sea of color, spotlighting just 2…emphasis on her. Beautiful, Naaj
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Thank you, my kindred.
Your words mean a lot to meNaaj
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So glad you dropped in, hun.
This write was something personal and long overdue.
Thank youNaaj
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Beautifully penned, Naaj. An incredible tribute, amazing imagery and wordplay my friend. Sorry for your loss, brother. Much respect. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Huge thx for your thoughts on this vibe, bro.
Yeah…this one hit different for obvious reasons.Much respect
Naaj
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Big thx, Angel for your wonderful comments. I appreciate you for dropping by
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Reminds me of the saying “you’re only as good as your last hit”. Not really sure why, but has that vibe of chasing a dream.
Great ink
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Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Nick. So glad you connected with the write my friend. That saying is actually true to an extent. Whether it be a record company, or songwriting partner, they believe that to be the case. It’s a crazy world. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Makes me wonder what happened & where he went in his mind. Watching someone whose clock is ticking on self-destruct mode is rough. Friendships always seem to be the first casualties. Sounds like he choose something not real over value, in my opinion, my friend
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Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Willow. So glad you connected with write my friend. In the end it was all about him. He only came to me when help was needed where his bandmates couldn’t help. What changed the most was even in those moments when I would help, he questioned every idea. Then would take something he liked I said, and totally reword it into his lines. That may sound petty on it’s face on my part, but it wasn’t like that until the last 6 months we were friends. It was like he doubted me for some reason. I mean all I did was get sober, while he remained on the sauce. Go figure. lol. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Best line: funneling booze into a hemorrhaging mind…
Great work as always Damian!
Daniel
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Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Daniel. So glad you connected with the write my friend. I loved that line a lot as well. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Fantastic work, my friend. Vivid and sharp.
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Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Thomas. So glad you connected with the write my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Mary. So glad you connected with the write my friend. It was for the best I guess, he’s still doing the same thing last I heard. Meanwhile, I got a whole creative family/community first at DU then here at SR. I host, Backstage, and SpotLight. And I’m writing again, I think I did alright on my own. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Always a joy reading your writes. Sadly, friendships usually don’t last forever. Great write my friend.
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Thanks so much for reading and your kind words, Keith. So glad you connected with the write my friend. That they don’t, it’s kinda sad when you really think about that little footnote you just mentioned. Appreciate you.
Damian
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I can seriously feel the tension in this piece, Daniel. You’re building this beautifully. My recommendations are to look at other options for the word, ‘snow’. It becomes redundant. Also, Chloe might refer to the men in the shadows as ‘bad boys’, but Gwen and the narrator may want a more specific term – something more specific or sophisticated and relevant to the circumstances.
Your writing is compelling