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Read MoreYour inconsistencies are consistentHappy yet state your sadAngry but seem to be gladRelaxed but wound tightWant to be gentle yet you biteNo one understandsNo one took the timeNo one gave a shitAlways left behindWeeping from rageSpilling into the calm...
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Thank you, willow
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I like the contrast you used in some verses. Dark thoughts indeed. Well done, Fia!
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Thank you, M.E appreciate that
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Powerfully penned, Fia. Into the book it belongs! Amazing write my friend, with dark vibes very present. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Thank you, Damian. was in the zone.
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Thank you, Adira;))
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Fantatic!
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Thank you, Adagio
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G’Mornin’, Fia 🌤️
Good title, and what a great lead-in with V1’s frustrating contradictions setting the mood for what’s to come (L2, make it “you’re” sad).
Boy howdy! You sure know how to express the angst so many of us have had to endure and overcome; yet, it seems some never do … sadly so.You’re such a creative writer, Ria: I admire your keen ability to weave vivid imagery and emotion throughout every verse and in the use of spot-on rhymes, timely line-breaks, and smooth flow.
Excellent wrap-up verse, too. For rhyme’s sake with “despair,” consider using “there” rather than “here” (just a thought).“Wake, wake from this despair! (great poe-esque touch)
It is me you’re talking to …
no one else is there.”Fia, you’re such a joy to read and share with. 🌈
Thank you ever-so warmly! ⁓ Richard🖌-
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Thank you so much for the compliment and comment. Richard I appreciate it
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Oh, sure thing, Fia!
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Yes, it has been changed. Ty ;))
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You misunderstood, Fia … I meant to change L4 to “there”. Not L2, which was fine as “despair”.
So “despair” and “there” rhyme.
(like this)
Still, you find me in your dreams
Wake, wake from this despair
It is me you’re talking to
No one else is there.
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Very captivating.
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Thank you, CasketSharpe;))
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Thank you, Steven;))
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Read MorePlease hold me when the bombs drop. Till there’s no skin left on my flesh. Keep smiling till our time’s up. I need you close when I turn to ash.This war isn’t yours or mine but still ours for...
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I wish this didn’t resonate so deeply with me. Sigh…
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Thank you Willow!
Just listened to the song you and Mary made on YouTube. My god it’s so good…
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An eye-opening write! Unfortunately true and real.
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Powerfully penned, Drieks. Nice arrangement, and you’re just a phenomenal lyricist my friend. So relevant in present times, and so unfortunately true. Excellent work. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Thank you for your kind words Damian! 🙏🏻
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Outstanding!
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Thank you Adagio!
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Thank you so much Mary 🙏🏻
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Love is like a Cossack sword dance. Reflex and intuition combined with lethal beauty. 🌼
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hello dearest Joe indeed it is thank you graciously for your thoughts 💕
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A well written piece! “)
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thank you dearest Me good evening 💕
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Passionately penned, Brenda. Excellent write my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Read MoreMaybe you're insecure.Yet,you don't know what for.Was it something a loved one said? Or something that you were made?When you walk,you turn heads.But you throw those thoughts into shreds. Trust me,you won't need makeup.When your natural beauty shines.And insecurity is what...
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Backdeckbenny (Peter) wrote a new post
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Read MoreI open for no one.I choose.But when I want you,when the ache coils low and deep,I am the mouth that swallows your name.Between my thighs is no mysteryjust hunger,wet and waiting in the velvet bloomyou tremble to taste.Call it...
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Wow, that is hot.
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Thanks Fia….. powerful women are a real turn on.
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Okay, that’s one of the most incredible nods to someone I have EVER had the pleasure to read. Bravo!
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Thanks Willow….it’s just how I’d imagined a strong woman speaking.🌞🙏
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