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Read MoreUpon the sharpest Hook moon of fright Answering the call Of a newborn nightSummoning inside this Rusted metal shed Surrounded by misted Red air of dread Remnants of lovers From who I...
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Thanks Fia! I wanted it to sound almost like a lullaby. lol
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Hello, can I interest you in a Frankenstein type guy? LOL.
I love when you get all voracious! This is a dare ya write, you know!
Okay okay. Enchanting write, Vampira! I love the aggressiveness of it, the baring of fangs and display of an appetite for human consumption…
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I was in the mood after reading all the fun stuff
And you are just my type mister. Perfect. 😍
I’m glad I enchanted you with my fangs!
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Beautifully penned, Adel. Excellent Halloween write my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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Thank you Damien!
I enjoy fantasy horror.
I love Van Helsing! The one with Hugh Jackman.
And The Mummy with Brendon Fraser.Thanks for checking this out amigo!
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Nice and spooky for the Halloween season. 🙂
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Tis the season Tim!
Now I need a huge bag of Snickers and Twix! HahahaLater gator!
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Even though I am not a huge fan of Halloween, this is pretty cool .. in fact it’s bloody much better than that .. Neville 🐈⬛🖤🐧😎👍
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Nev, amigo!
When I think of Halloween I remember getting on the tailgate of my dad’s truck with my friends to go trick or treating.
Some of my best memories. We would do each other’s makeup and have a blast. lol
There are a few neighborhoods in my hometown that still go all. People will park a block away and walk with their kids up and down the neighborhood.I’m glad you enjoyed the write! Now go take advantage of all the awesome chocolate varieties on Halloween 🎃
Snickers & Twix! Even the Reese’s peanut butter cups are cool:)-
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You can beat an egg and a drum but you can’t beat a Twix can ya eh’ 😎👍
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Oh! This is good.
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Thank you!
I wanted it to sound like a dark tale from Disney. lol
Hope that made sense!
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Tis the season for the undead. Great ink.
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Thank you! It was fun to write!
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An interesting write, suitable for the season.
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Well hello there Mr. FlatDaddy!
I wrote this around three years ago. I was in a vampy witchy mood. lol
Thanks for stopping by amigo!
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Read MoreNeruda’s Lips I have flayed your body with my tongue of fire, suckled your youthful breasts with lust and desire, eaten your musky whispers with the deadliest of sins, and all the common words of my peasant’s pen. You are the poetry of my land, the dark earth...
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This poem beautifully channels Neruda’s sensual spirit. The union of passion, earth, and language. The imagery feels both intimate and elemental, echoing the way Neruda made love and nature inseparable.
It’s a stirring tribute that captures his essence…beautifully penned.
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Neruda’s love sonnets are some of the best poetry ever written (IMHO). And yes, exactly, love and nature are inseparable, flowing in and around each other. Thank you, RomaJ for your lovely and muchly appreciated comment and visit. You are always welcome to walk through my poetry.
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This has so much passion in this. I agree with Romaj beautifully penned.
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Hi Fia, so happy you felt the passion. Thank you!
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Damn!
Excellent! You had me at “flayed”. What a vivid, well placed word.-
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I love that word (flayed). It felt and sounded right to use it in this poem. Thanks for your observation and for the fine comment.
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You turned the poem into something else with this, “and all the common words of my peasant’s pen.” Following the next verse, IF you didn’t brilliantly did this, it would have been just a strong sensual poem, but with how amazingly You brought a higher level with the last two line of verse one, then the gorgeous verse two, is what makes the poem very special to me, exploring and expressing a deeper connection. I believe Pablo would admire this🤍
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One of the things I love about Neruda’s poetry is his use of everyday words. With them, he word paints images, metaphors and a feeling of LIFE that exists and surrounds us with HOPE.
Light, thank you so much for your insight and understanding of what I wanted (no, needed) to express. If Neruda were still alive, I think I would be tempted to send this poem to him.
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It was/is my pleasure to “whisper” and a big Thank You to the Roman Goddess, daughter of Cupid and Psyche. It’s not often I get a comment from royalty. Not sure I am worthy, but it is appreciated muchly.
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You are most welcome my friend🌸 and consider your poem sent, his soul is still out there, just call Him 😊
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Yes, please post it. I would love to read what, how you see Neruda’s love sonnets.
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Read MoreCOMING HOME: SONGS OF AFRICA“Always, there is someone hungrier than the poorest in America.”“Some of us know how we came by our fortunes, and some of us don’t, but we wear it all the same. There is only one...
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What a raw and intense tribute to Africa!
I’ve never been but you put into words and song a powerful truth.
How do we aim to live with it. Just wow-
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Hi Adelphina, thanks for your visit. I wrote this during a time when my poems had more of an ‘edge’ to them. I wanted my poetry to be part of and reflect a culture of resistance, that was not agitprop but still drove straight to the heart of the reader. To tell the truth about the world but not preach at people. This poem began that journey. I liked this poem and so workshopped it with a writers group at the University of Iowa, and then I submitted it to some literary magazines, but none of them printed it. Oh well.
Adelphina, thank you for your comment; it is truly appreciated.
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This poem is powerful. Both a song of mourning and a call to remembrance. I love how the repetition and rhythm make “Africa” itself feel like a heartbeat pulsing through each stanza.
The imagery is rich with longing and pride, and the movement from loss to reclamation is deeply moving. It feels like a spiritual homecoming through language itself.
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What a beautiful comment, RomaJ. Thank you so much. You might be surpised, but a few of the people in the writers group (mentioned above to Adelphina) expressed similar feelings. But they also tore through it viciously. This is the final version.
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Yes..vampires, werewolves and the goes bump on hollioween..
This has a great A-B flow to it. Nicely done