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RICHARD "Rascal" JENKINS posted in the group ”BACK TO POETRY BASICS”
GOODNESS, TFT!
Now, THAT is a proper Sonnet … it’s obvious you’ve done your homework.
Your creativity sparks, emotion sings, and diction dances. And, I like your use of elision. Could use a bit’a punctuation.
See critique and edits below:I said I don’t do THIS. POems that behave (STRESS-STRESS / a count long)
that count their beats and…Read More![Profile Photo]()
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much appreciated. good luck convincin me to use punctuation 😉
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Now, Syr Bard
Post it so everyone can enjoy your amazing flexibility and creativity with a poet’s pen.
I’ll be first in line to review it for you! ⁓ Richard
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twofiftythree posted in the group ”BACK TO POETRY BASICS”
I said I don’t do this. poems that behave
that count their beats and beg to sound profound
but here I am the fool you couldn’t save
all rhyme and reason. love still hangin roundI hate this form. it’s polished. cold. confined
like scrubbin blood just so it stains again
I tell myself to leave your heart behind
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Read MoreWhen I grow up IThen will blow up myDress shirt and necktie(Bes’ suit too!), Heck IMeans I’ll wear LeviJeans and my tenniShoes, And I’ll choose toLose those ol’ blues, doDrink some good booze, too!Think I may snooze twoDays, read...
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I don’t know if I ever grew up. Losing that spark of silly just seems tragic to me. Glad you stumbled on this old gem. Made me smile 😊
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Oh, thank you! I wasn’t sure I wanted to keep it, but reading it again made me smile, too, so I thought I’d share it and see what others thought. If no one else leaves a positive note, you alone have made this venture worthwhile.
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Thank you dearly my friend! I so need all this feedback! You and Willow have lifted me up today! It is I who need you!
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You??!! Grown up?? Highly doubtful, not with pup-pies running around or with fishbowl gup-pies. And I am guessing you are good friends with that ‘flying’ Peter and his pixie friend. I think we “older” folk need a slogan or motto, something like “The older I gets, the younger I feels” (in mind if not in body…LOL). And of course we will also need a theme song, this poem will do quite nicely I think!!!! Go, FlatDaddy, GO! Keep on rockin’ tha stage!! And the crowd ‘snaps’ galore.
Curt
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Oh, hell, Curt, you don’t want to REALLY get me going, do you? Really? Because I can do that, Curt. That’s what I was MADE FOR! You asked for it! Check out: https://starsrite.com/2025/09/26/i-know-why-im-here-how-bout-you-2/ That is me. And please, it is “Spoken Word,” so go to the bottom of the page where you can click it to hear the Audio version and follow along with the text.
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Read MoreThe Grim ReaperThe old woman was taking a walk through the forest, like she did every day before breakfast. She enjoyed the fresh morning air and the silence. There was hardly anyone outside at this early hour. To her...
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Hello Elke. Outstanding story. A stellar piece of writing that captures so much detail and intrigue. A perfect piece for this time of year. Well done my friend. xo
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Thank you so much for reading and your kind comment, dear Keith! Your comments always tear my heart wide open with gratitude and awe!
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Quite the riveting tale, Sappho! It was very clever of you to switch up the common portrayals of death and love. I enjoyed all the natural references and surprises you sprinkled throughout this piece. Excellent write, my friend.
Clay
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Your kind comment and your appreciation makes me blush, dear Clay! Thank you very much!
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So beautiful, so dark, so you Brenda. Excellent piece my friend.
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good mornig dearest Keith I’m happy you liked it I was worried I went too far but I never worried about that before why start now right? thank you my friend ❤️
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Redemption with a hollow scream. Love it, Brenda.
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hello dearest Adagio good morning thank you graciously I deeply appreciate you ❤️
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hello lovely one good evening thank you just a feeling that overcame me last night I wasn’t sure if I should write this I’m happy it worked for you ❤️
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Hauntingly penned, Brenda. Phenomenal write my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
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V3L4 should be: What’s next, a ballad? Maybe, one or two.