This is an interesting conversation between the two (father and daughter). the opening about how the body reacts even though it is deceased is and interesting opening.

This is so sad. The repetitive statement of how long it could really make me feel sad for her.” Safe, dry and warm” I hate thinking about children in place where they do not have this. But cannot run and hide for the reality of it. Good story

Thank you so much, Fia, I wanted to express the tragedy of the thousands of children caught up in war – in this case trapped in Ukraine, her parents dead, relying on her imagined fantasies for freedom and escape, then Gaza, and Sudan, now Iran – why are we so inhuman towards those most vulnerable? HJx

It is a bit musical. I wish for a better day, each and every day. That deer lost in headlights is so true

I agree.

Thank you for putting it into words so eloquently.

Got my foot tapping away from the off to the end and back again .. Nice one too sir . Neville

Damian the fire in the eyes of those zealous followers of the pied piper elevated to guru status is painted in your poem with fire and smoke. Truly a smoking great poem that is as strong emotionally as it is rhythmically. You have real talent my friend.

John