Halloween may be over, Fia

But, you’ve learned the trick of keeping the ghostly treat of love’s forever haunting passion vibrantly alive, and what better than a beautifully laid Senryu to share it all with us in such a sweet way … maybe, a lover’s spell will be cast, returning “him” to your warming, tear-filled heart and arms.

Your i…Read More

SPECIAL NOTES:

[example 1, of course, violates the no rhymes rule, but I wanted to show it anyway as a possibility of using the basic Senryu format’s flexibility]

[examle 3 | repeated from above in proper format]

K A T A N A

sharp samurai soul
forged folded tempered by fire
victorious dreams

Sheer brilliance, Syr 253

You’ve mastered the heatbeat techniques of Free Verse poetry: Imagery, deeply gripping emotion, metaphor, spot-on line-breaks, seamless enjambment, syntax; and, except for the distraction of missing “g’s”, your diction and spellbinding flow would be irresistibly captivating to the senses.

Also, your well-placed…Read More

Beautifully imagined, Fia, an excellent effort!
Deserves a VERY strong title!

ISSUES TO CONSIDER:
1. Unnecessarily Capitalizing every line, which tends to confuse when one complete line, thought, etc; begins or ends, effectively stumbling the flow, attention, and overall magical smoothness of a poem’s captive spell.
2. Poetic voice … how a poe…Read More