I really appreciate that, Adira. I know I could comment more. Im just not much of an analyst lmao! Just a writer haha. Doesn’t mean I don’t read your work. Again, 😊 thanks!

Powerfully penned, Daniel. Amazing write, you’re a very authentic writer my friend. Appreciate you.

Damian

Powerfully authentic, Daniel. Amazing write my friend. Appreciate you.

Damian

A true fan you are! Appreciate you!

Beautifully penned, Daniel. Into the book it belongs! Amazing write my friend. Appreciate you.

Damian

And there’s a dominance in your kiss…
Love that line. Good piece

I love the gothic style here.
Very powerful and I envy such a beauty…haunting.
Love it.
xx
~P.G💋

Powerfully penned, Daniel. An intriguing write my friend. Appreciate you.

Damian

Intriguing…

I like the contrast you used in some verses. Dark thoughts indeed. Well done, Fia!

Powerfully penned, Fia. Into the book it belongs! Amazing write my friend, with dark vibes very present. Appreciate you.

Damian

Thank you, Adira;))

Fantatic!

G’Mornin’, Fia 🌤️

Good title, and what a great lead-in with V1’s frustrating contradictions setting the mood for what’s to come (L2, make it “you’re” sad).
Boy howdy! You sure know how to express the angst so many of us have had to endure and overcome; yet, it seems some never do … sadly so.

You’re such a creative writer, Ria: I admire your keen ability to weave vivid imagery and emotion throughout every verse and in the use of spot-on rhymes, timely line-breaks, and smooth flow.
Excellent wrap-up verse, too. For rhyme’s sake with “despair,” consider using “there” rather than “here” (just a thought).

“Wake, wake from this despair! (great poe-esque touch)
It is me you’re talking to …
no one else is there.”

Fia, you’re such a joy to read and share with. 🌈
Thank you ever-so warmly! ⁓ Richard🖌

Very captivating.

Thank you, Steven;))