This is so dark and haunting. fav line is “Their shrill shadowed the echo through these hollow halls,
“The dark-suited burial conveyance led amiss of a poet’s demise.”

Very good. I just read that Musk said that death is faulty design and in the future we will figure out how to fix it.

Thanks Fia.
Don’t normally agree with Elon but he is right that death will be eventually defeated by science but probably only for the rich.
You wouldn’t want the poor living forever now ..would you.
Seriously,who really wants to live forever..not me.
💋

Cleverly penned, Peter. Powerful write my friend. Appreciate you.

Damian

Cleverly penned, Fia. Excellent write my friend, I always enjoy your amazing storytelling. Appreciate you, cuz.

Damian

Fantastic. Love it, Fia.

Why not just flush Maurice?? Get rid of the non team player! maybe he can go rule the sewers or something, LOL.
I’m just being logical! Or put his ass with a male Beta (Japanese Fighting fish). No more Maurice!

Chère F.,
I’d love it if this would find you mellow and at ease, just before the weekend.

I’ve read your poem and I don’t understand it.
blunt Dutch analysis.
But I love the kiss by Brancusi (singer museum Leiden the Netherlands) without understanding too.
I love some of Rothko’s work too.

Understanding isn’t always about what you/I can grasp at any time!
I love this write of yours and I think it’s raking me a little more time.

So:
Please be patient with me!
I’ll be back, I promise! Have a very nice weekend…..
Warm Waving from a distance, Gus

Cook Maurice and have him as an appetizer. He’d be with you forever. Great story Fia.

This starts playful but slowly tightens into something darker.
Power and cruelty don’t need much space to show themselves.

Clean slate works also. Lol

I think you’ll need to build a little underwater jail and keep Maurice there as punishment.
This was great, yes it’s frustrating that your fishes kept dying but I love how you told this story not just as the observer but almost like a deity that you had power but they kept dying on you while you weren’t looking.
Awesome work.

Passionately penned, Betty. Excellent write my friend. Appreciate you.

Damian

Oh-Wow! I absolutely loved this, Betty. Best wishes, Harriet-Jacqui Furl, published erotica author

Betty love your writes. Wooo

Your pieces are always so stimulating Lady, to tight

What! Betty graces us with some creative writing here! Or, also known as Lillith has entered Eden! What!

“forearm against your pelvis” = Details are everything, and this is exquisitely precise to make it a real moment. That bit of control is boss!
Well you had mentioned that you were going to concentrate on erotica. So that explains this humdinger of a write!
The way you make it so realistic, without any overly porn promotion, shows your skill, ahem, at creative writing.
Good to see you donating to the site. It’s about time!

Icon? Don’t be calling me no foreign little car made by Hundai !! I’m tall dammit!
Okay okay.
You are a premium writer, Betty. Any site goes up in value with you posting in it. It isn’t always about the subject matter. It’s the technique and ability of the writer that carries the weight. You are gold.

Gotta love the raw honesty spilling onto the page without restraint. “Are those your toes curling in the sheets?” it’s that damn good.
Nice work Betty.

LOL, thanks Wally. I appreciate you!